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anonymous August 25 2010, 20:34:09 UTC
'E' again:

This really made me feel for Morgan. It's one thing to be socially awkward and oblivious; its another to be socially awkward and aware of it, particularly in such a place as a royal court.

Clever girl, picking a spot so far down the rocks. Truly private conversations in Narnia must be few and far between.

Nice how they both acknowledge that both of them have crow like tendencies. Imagination vs. Intellect. Hee.

Edmund introducting her to Aslan: that's a pretty powerful step, given Jalur's speech in BRD about what it takes to capture the heart of a Narnian.

And the ending is bittersweet; her failing to meet his eyes but saying she would like to extend her stay. I imagine just asking her to stay was quite a feat for Edmund.

(Unabashedly requests more)

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rthstewart August 26 2010, 00:47:54 UTC
As for more, see comment response in previous entry from Part 1. This has been SO HARD to do. I recently got a review from someone for a chapter of TQSiT and I realized how much I depend upon feedback to guide future developments. I DO pander, but I also really read very closely what others say and write. Some things I don't change, but I do pay very close attention to everything ( ... )

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metonomia August 26 2010, 06:24:34 UTC
Awwwww, Edmund! This is so very sweet and sincere and perfect. I've told you over and over that I love Harold and Morgan, and they just keep getting more and more awesome. Awkward socially, yes, but so sincere and honest and well-meaning and smart and lovely.

This is the perfect little summer story. It has that feel, of them sitting out on the water, the sun and the Gulls and the idea of summer love. It's perfection.

Edmund's imagination and intellect are glorious characters as ever, and this just makes me want entire stories of Morgan chilling with Aslan.

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rthstewart August 26 2010, 14:07:23 UTC
E pointed out above that chilling with Aslan has some real implications, so I need to sort through that. Thank you so much for reading and responding. I so very much appreciate it.

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rthstewart August 26 2010, 14:05:44 UTC
Oh I have not forgotten it or TSG. It's only whether and how to keep writing at all. So I'm taking baby steps. Thank you for reading!

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intrikate88 August 28 2010, 03:36:23 UTC
I lovelovelove the socially awkward but lovable characters --Bones, Sheldon Cooper, Parker-- and so I just keep on liking how you have evolved Morgan into a really interesting character in that type. Edmund's comparisons of the uniqueness of all the Beasts with Morgan's unique personality worked really strongly, and ties in so well with everything else you've made a point of saying in all your other stories- that differences are good and that the Pevensies are always becoming better at being people who can see that.

Also, yay fic! Because I've been bogged down in my own non-moving fics, wishing other people would post anything decent for me to read, and lamenting that my flist is just. not. updating.

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rthstewart August 28 2010, 19:47:24 UTC
Thanks so much! The good thing about having the thematic elements in my head and that they are consistent throughout is that I can constantly put them into different contexts. The details might be a little fuzzy, but the same themes can be visited over and over.

And there's not been a lot of decent fic lately, it seems. I know I've not reviewed much lately. Thank you again!

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