Day 20 - Team Muggle: Fic: The Chocolate Fountain

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Muggle
Title: The Chocolate Fountain
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Word Count:3629 Words
Summary: Every Friday, Sirius and his family (and later Sirius and James) come into the restaurant that Remus works at.
Notes: Thank you so much to the mods. You're too amazing.
Prompt: 26 - melted chocolate

Comments

[bearshorty]

Very cute. I loved the build up and a very persistent and confident Sirius. And I like how the point of view shifted in the middle and we see how James sees Sirius too. Great story with a kiss at the end! And now I want some chocolate.

[cevennes]

This is nine kinds of adorable! I love how guarded Remus is at first, even steeling himself against Sirius' flirting when it starts up (what a trooper, honestly) and slowly letting himself realize he's got it baaaaad. And James' exasperation at Sirius being TOTALLY in love at least a dozen times was great, especially as it becomes clearer that he's got it just as bad for Remus. The combination of Sirius' impulsiveness and Remus' cautious solemnity makes a fantastic dynamic, and the kiss at the end was such a delight--I love how full of quiet promise this is all through! This was so much fun to read, and it's left me smiling for ages afterwards. :)))

[queenkerosene]

Very cute! I really like the switched of James coming in with Sirius; the notion of him helping Sirius pick up Remus was quite amusing to me for some reason.

[abyss_valkyrie]

Nyyyaa!!this makes me go like this-> :3!!

I love love loved this Sirius,so honest and innocent and so darn persistent but not in a creepy way.And poor Remus, the way he thinks of the chocolate fountain with its germs!Hahah!!I want to gift him a chocolate fountain all for himself! He was really great,really in character and I could just picture him feeling for Sirius but trying to convince himself otherwise.

Although,I have to say,James's way of describing Sirius and differentiating between his crushes and conquests gave such an insight to Sirius's character. Of course,Sirius's mother would have to one of those people!UGH!You wrote their family quite perfectly I say,not a fun thing for Sirius but it's true! :)

[dustmouth]

Ah this was the sweetest story (in all sense of the word- oh ho ho~)

I really loved the setting, Remus working himself to the bone feels so very him. The Black family dynamic was perfect, I will admit that I actually have quite a soft spot for fics that deal with them as a family unit, and this one caught that kind of tension between them all perfectly.
You really cleverly caught a really strong sense of the time passing, I think especially impressive since you did it in so few words, so that it really did feel as though there was a long wait before the conclusion.
I think my favourite moment would probably have been Remus betraying his true feelings when Sirius and James hadn't been for a while, and that he then just continued to slip. Something about it all felt so very in character.
This really was the loveliest story, such charming work!