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[rose_of_pollux]

So... I had the story idea for this after I learned in Egyptology about how the real Seti had four children, but how something happened to one of them, which sparked this Yu-Gi-Oh story idea with YGO Sethos and Túaa... I was very reluctant to try this story idea, as it is a huge departure from what I normally write, which is why it's going to be

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[heiress_trial]

So sad. You did an excellent job. I hope you write more like this.

TDH

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[rose_of_pollux]

Thanks... it was really strange writing something so sad, but it did work out the way I had hoped!

Glad you liked it! Thanks!

[insaneladybug]

Awww, so sad! Poor everyone! Especially Kubera blaming himself. But squee at Sethos thinking of him as a brother!

Poor Userma'atre, too, feeling so justifiably angry and wanting to avenge his brother! I love Sethos deciding to tell him the story of the past.

BTW, was he wounded in the arm or the shoulder? XD; The first time it says "shoulder", and the other two times it says "arm."

Also, this sentence sounds a bit awkward: “And yet the position sought me, as it seems to will eventually do for you,” Was that supposed to be "it" instead of "to"?

Totally inappropriate, but I can just imagine Joey's horror if he knew that his ancestor was the servant of Seto's ancestor. XD

[rose_of_pollux]

**nod nod** It did turn out very well, but it was just so sad... Kubera actually starts out as the keeper of the royal elephant, as will be seen in the upcoming chapters of "Ijtahwy," but soon gains the king's favor.

**fixes those** Oops ^^ I meant it to be upper arm, near the shoulder area (at least, that was the image I had; I keep forgetting that people can't read my mind XD)

LOL! That's a blurb idea for another time! XD (how do you get that strikethrough effect?)

[insaneladybug]

**nods.** I would have liked to have seen a little more detail, both physical and emotional, but I imagine that would have been hard for you to write on your first time with something so sad.

XD

I put <*strike*> at the beginning and <*/strike*> at the end. Without the asteriks. **isn't sure it will show up even with them.**

[rose_of_pollux]

**nods as well** Yeah, it was a bit difficult to write. Maybe someday I'll revise it...

Ahh, thanks!

[pfefferminztea]

"Not if I can help it"? That was SO Seto! ;)
I must admit I had some difficulties to link the ancient Egyptian characters to their modern counterparts, but that scene reminded me of him instantly.
Otherwise, I can just say as the others did - you did an excellent job here!
The story is totally set against an ancient background, without to much showing off of (maybe inappropriate) details, just to prove you know your history.
Only one thing occured to me - I think I heard the mummyfication took 70 days, not two months, but come to think of it, that was probably the one of a pharaoh.

[rose_of_pollux]

Thanks! Ahh, ancient Azureshipping!

Yeah, there were a lot of details I could've added, but didn't. That's why I mentioned the mummification taking about two months; it is 70 days, but I just rounded it down. ^^

Glad you liked it! It felt so strange, writing something so sad... but I think it turned out pretty well.