House: Lost (The Pandora’s Gift Remix)
[ Stacy, House | G | 542 words ]
Stacy waited for Greg to wake up.
Spoilers: Set during “Three Stories.”
Original Story: Lost by dreams_power, 301 words.
Remix author: melodyunity
( Lost (The Pandora’s Gift Remix) )
Stacy waited for Greg to wake up.
Spoilers: Set during “Three Stories.”
Original Story: Lost by dreams_power, 301 words.
Remix author: melodyunity
( Lost (The Pandora’s Gift Remix) )
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Greg would yell and complain and cut her to ribbons with the sharp, bitter edge of his tongue.
What a great description of his verbal assaults.
Alive, they whispered to her with each mechanical note - and in the end, that was all that mattered, that steady pulse, that song, that hallelujah: alive alive alive.
I just adore the prose in this part. Truly beautiful: the pacing, the lyricism, the emotion.
Her betrayal had surely been redeemed by the grace of that smile.
Ouch. So painful because the reader knows the inevitable is coming.
Oh. Oh. Stacy flinched.
Love how understated this is.
He was alive, therefore she had done the right thing.
Hadn’t she?
Oh, perfect. I must admit, I'm not that much of a Stacy fan, but the way you wrote her in this makes me wonder if I wasn't giving her a fair chance. Nicely done, and also nicely done as a remix!
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I just adore the prose in this part. Truly beautiful: the pacing, the lyricism, the emotion.
Thank you! I have to admit, I was very pleased with how those lines turned out.
I must admit, I'm not that much of a Stacy fan, but the way you wrote her in this makes me wonder if I wasn't giving her a fair chance.
This is just about the best compliment a writer can get!
Oddly enough, I'm not too terribly fond of Stacy either, but I do think I understand her and why she made the decision she did. It's good to know I was able to communicate that.
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She dreaded the moment when he did.
That explains the situation very well, sadly.
But he had trouble acting in his own best interests sometimes, and she would bear the brunt of that anger gladly. Anger was good. Anger was life. The dead were always at peace.
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^+^ You captured Stacey very well here. Good read, so I'm glad you remixed it.
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Yes. That was one of things about your original story that captured my attention -- the juxtaposition of those two emotions, that conflict that Stacy showed in the last paragraph.
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Aw, thanks!
You captured Stacey very well here. Good read, so I'm glad you remixed it.
Thank you so much! I've never done a remix before, and I was a bit nervous to see what you would think of it! I'm so glad you liked it!
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