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Apr 02, 2007 06:51

Title: Nothing But Fighting
Author: bratanimus
Summary: Remus/Lily, set during their sixth year at Hogwarts. Merlin, why hadn’t James told him how much fun fighting with Lily was?
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Language
Word Count: 4128
Author’s Note: My prompts were the Decemberists’ song, first fight, and lust. The fic doesn’t really have anything to do with the ( Read more... )

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Comments 30

severity_softly April 2 2007, 13:30:27 UTC

I LOVE this! The description of their dueling was great - how well they matched each other, and her catching the Aguamenti on purpose! And that moment when she was gripping his wrist and she caught him looking down at her lips was terribly sexy! Nice job!

bratanimus April 3 2007, 00:24:39 UTC

:D Thanks! I'm really happy that you liked it. Glad you though the wrist gripping moment was sexy. I'm planning on writing more R/L fics that are MUCH sexier. ;)

And thank you for the pimp of this fic on your LJ! I got one review below because of it, and reviews are always appreciated.

You're right, I was totally thinking of Fight Club when I started writing this story! ;) But I also wanted to give it a First War spin, as these kids must have been scared out of their minds that they were about to finish school and fight for real, knowing that death might be a very real outcome of any confrontation after school. So, their dueling clubs at Hogwarts must have felt pretty essential.

Thanks again for the lovely review!

severity_softly April 3 2007, 00:46:21 UTC

You're right, I was totally thinking of Fight Club when I started writing this story! ;)

LOL, well, good to know I wasn't totally off base there! ;) But you're right, once I put Fight Club out of my head and started thinking First War, it made a lot of sense. Trio era has got the whole DA thing, after all.

I look forward to more! *g* Actually, I'm friending you, if you don't mind, so I won't miss more. :D

bratanimus April 3 2007, 01:22:28 UTC

Trio era has got the whole DA thing, after all.

Very astute of you to bring that up, as I actually was trying to establish a parallel between Teen!Remus and Harry in their desires to prepare their friends for the real world. You're the first to mention that. ;)

Actually, I'm friending you, if you don't mind, so I won't miss more. :D

Great! I'm friending you back! :D

daintress April 2 2007, 22:32:12 UTC

Excellent story. I haven't seen much Lily/Remus, but I enjoyed it quite a lot. :)

bratanimus April 3 2007, 00:25:38 UTC

Thank you! I'm pleased that you liked it! Hopefully we'll have lots of R/L fics here soon. :)

innerslytherin April 2 2007, 23:47:48 UTC

Here via severity_softly's rec. This is really good. I like the way the duelling style of each person reflects his or her characterisation. I also like how the club got started, with the Slytherin prefect and Remus negotiating. And Lily - wow. This is a very hot fic, sizzling with UST. I haven't read a lot of Lily/Remus, but this is definitely the best one I have read.

bratanimus April 3 2007, 00:29:25 UTC

Thanks for popping over to read, and thanks especially for the thoughtful review! :D

I'm glad you thought the dueling styles were in character. And I'm happy that you liked the negotations between Remus and the Slytherin prefect; I always thought that Remus might offer more tolerance toward certain Slytherins than James and Sirius (and perhaps that might be a reason for them to mistrust him later). I'm especially pleased that you liked Lily in this; I really wanted her to be a badass that Remus couldn't help falling for. ;)

Thanks again!

innerslytherin April 3 2007, 01:01:54 UTC

*grin* As Lupin/Snape is my OTP, I have to agree with you that Remus would be more tolerant towards Slytherins. ^_~ And I definitely like that you see that as a reason for them to mistrust him later. It makes sense.

Lily just plain IS a badass. Any woman who would stand up to Voldemort like that and die for her son is badass to the core. *grin*

bratanimus April 3 2007, 01:26:22 UTC

As Lupin/Snape is my OTP, I have to agree with you that Remus would be more tolerant towards Slytherins. ^_~

Excellent! LOL :D

Any woman who would stand up to Voldemort like that and die for her son is badass to the core.

Well said. ;)

anonymous April 3 2007, 03:24:31 UTC

I thoroughly enjoyed this. I'm intrigued your idea of duelling as conversation. Sirius wants to do all the talking. Of course. Remus tells people what they want to hear. Yep. And Lily. Erm. Could we characterize her as a passionate debater? :)

I wish there had been more contestants, because now I'm curious about the rest of the gang: James, Peter, Severus, ....

Lovely!

bratanimus April 3 2007, 03:31:33 UTC

Thank you, whoever you are, Anonymous! ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed the dueling as conversation idea. And I really liked your take on Lily as a passionate debater! I wish I'd had time to have everyone duel. Perhaps sequels?

Thanks again for the lovely review! :D

eshesh April 4 2007, 01:44:55 UTC

Oops! It was me, inadvertently incognito. That's what I get for sneaking onto my son's computer....

Sequels always get my vote!

bratanimus April 4 2007, 10:16:46 UTC

That's what I get for sneaking onto my son's computer....

LOL :D I often forget to sign in, too. Who knows how many anonymous reviews I've left. ;)

I certainly don't mind anonymous reviews (I'll take whatever I can get ;)), but I do like to respond and properly thank the person who took the time to leave it. So ...

Thanks again! :D

lady_bracknell April 4 2007, 11:40:45 UTC

This is really great. I love the idea of them duelling partly for practice and partly for release - and I just loved this line: It wasn’t about who won here. It was about who lost, and what that might mean in the real world.It seemed to sum up very much what it's like for them, on the cusp of being thrust into a world where they could face death at a startlingly young age, and yet there's something quite teenage, too, about the idea of them meeting in secret, wanting a world of their own to retreat to, with their own rules. I agree with others, too, that the idea of Remus being the one to broker the deal, as it were, is perfect, since he always struck me as the one who's not as attached to the idea of his little exclusive group as the others ( ... )

bratanimus April 13 2007, 10:23:50 UTC

and I just loved this line: It wasn’t about who won here. It was about who lost, and what that might mean in the real world.

You know, I started typing that line and didn't realize where it was going until I reached the period. Then I said, "Whoa." :O Every once in a while something comes straight from your subconscious, and it's pretty cool when that happens.

he always struck me as the one who's not as attached to the idea of his little exclusive group as the others.

I agree. And I think that would certainly encourage suspicion in the others later (with Peter's help), especially if Remus has been known to negotiate with Slytherins.

I'd love to see more on this idea, where Remus and Lily go next.

I'm hoping to write another chapter or two, if I can finish some other plot bunnies first. Oh, and then there's A Star Danced, the next chapter of which I still haven't finished ( ... )