I Shall Roam the Summer Fields, Chapter 5 [Bleach]

[sophiap]

Title: I Shall Roam the Summer Fields ( Master Post)
Fandom: Bleach
Characters: Ensemble, and while this is primarily gen, a number of pairings (mostly but not entirely het) figure in the background. See master post if you need more details.
Word Count: Novel-length overall, c. 2,500 in this chapter.
Rating: R, mostly for language. Also, see

Comments

[incandescens]

This is great. I love how they're all reacting in different intelligent but personal ways.

My personal favourite was the line:

Byakuya acknowledged his presence in a manner meant to suggest he would rather ignore it...

[sophiap]

Thank you very much!

I'll admit to being partial to that line myself.

I find that I draw heavily from Laurence Harvey's performance in The Manchurian Candidate whenever I'm writing Byakuya--he delivers that sort of look perfectly.

[incandescens]

And also a bit of something I vaguely remember seeing in Saki somewhere -- "the studied unconcern of a Persian cat entering a crowded salon", I think it was.

[jnotjane]

"the studied unconcern of a Persian cat entering a crowded salon"
As a proud human owned by an uppity Persian cat, I know exactly what is meant by that saying!
Seriously, I am liking this story. Some very interesting implications with the return of those who have been dead for a long time. So far they all seem to have died in battle, but I'm sure that could/will change :)
As with the Winter War, I love your interpretation of the individual characters.

[hu3long2]

Have been following this story eagerly, and every chapter has been a beautifully controlled increase of suspense!

Thanks so much for writing this so beautifully!

[sophiap]

Thank you so much! I'm particularly glad to hear that the pacing/release of information is working well. I've had issues with that in the past, and I've been trying to pay a lot of attention to pace and flow on this project.

[vionaxinyi]

Love it, love it, love it. Especially love all the short one-line paragraphs that are being thrown around. Thanks for the awesome read! :D

[sophiap]

Thank you! I'm glad the short paragraphs worked in this scene. I don't normally write like that, but it seemed to fit this scene and the way ideas were being thrown around and thoughts were shifting.

[mainekosama]

This is great and I enjoy reading it very much. I'd like to point something special out, but there's a problem - I like ALL the parts and I can't just quote the whole thing. Exciting story!

[sophiap]

Thank you very much!

[hallowd]

I'm in awe of your ability to juggle so many characters and keep them distinct and personable. I think I also like the relatively slow unfolding of everything--it lends the story a sheen of menace that might be lost in a more action-packed narrative.

[sophiap]

Thank you so much!

I'm glad the slow unfolding is working for you. I'm trying to be careful not to go too slow (thank heavens for betas who are willing to tell me to trim or move scenes), but a more introspective pace feels natural for this story, given the impact that the dead returning would have on people.