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Gift for Boutondor from Mustbethursday3

Jan 02, 2013 13:07

There is not love where there is no will, Charlie/Miles, AU Drama-Crack, PG (swearing), (too many 4,700 words)
When Charlie was eight and a quarter (two years after the Blackout) men came and her family changed forever...

Author's notes: I started with Charlie and Miles not being related and then everything unravelled from there - Maggie's alive for ( Read more... )

(c): captain jeremy baker, (g): crack, (c): charlie matheson, (g): hurt/comfort, (c): jason 'nate' neville, (fw): fanfic, (c): maggie foster, (c): major tom neville, (p): charlie/miles, (g): au, (misc): secret santa, (c): miles matheson, (c): sebastian "bass" monroe, (l): one shot

Comments 13

corycides January 2 2013, 19:56:29 UTC

Finally, LJ lets me in. I am weirdly delighted about the idea of Maggie being alive and working for Monroe. It's one of those things I didn't even realise I wanted until now!

This was great. I thought the balance of humour worked well and Charlie was loads of fun as Bass' brat (but with a purpose) princess. She's still clearly Charlie, but growing up with Bass has given her a bit more of a manipulative streak :)

I would love to see a follow-up, if only to find out about what Rachel has been getting up to: “That’s what Mom says anyway and unfortunately anyone who can dispute her tends to have the lifespan of a gnat.”

Has she shanked more or less than in show canon :)

And I want to see Bass with Charlie and how Bass reacts to Miles and what Jason's up to and Jeremy and and and and....

refisher January 3 2013, 01:13:32 UTC

(I am up-voting the multi-chapter suggestion and for all these reasons! Also... You could do the Aaron-Jeremy thing if you can figure that out somehow. Like maybe Rachel secured him for his Googleness but didn't swat him like a gnat.)

mustbethursday3 January 4 2013, 12:30:23 UTC

You could do the Aaron-Jeremy thing if you can figure that out somehow. Like maybe Rachel secured him for his Googleness but didn't swat him like a gnat.

Ooooooh Aaron with a pendant, but how would he get it?

...Hmmmm. Maybe this could happen, as long as I can find a way to join the dots logically.

mustbethursday3 January 4 2013, 12:13:32 UTC

How weird it is to be on the other side of the review to you XD

I am weirdly delighted about the idea of Maggie being alive and working for Monroe. It's one of those things I didn't even realise I wanted until now!

She'd be fantastic in his orbit, right? I have this really vague mental image of the two of them in a World War II setting, the Yank and the Brit; the Soldier and the Nurse (who just happens to know more than the doctors she works with)...and that has nothing whatsoever do with this fic - but EH, I'm putting it out into the universe.

I'm still unsure exactly how much they interact in this universe, but I can't say I haven't thought of making it interesting and complicated.

I would love to see a follow-up, if only to find out about what Rachel has been getting up to

Hee *is flattered* ...you were like the perfect person to get a first comment from. I was feeling really iffy about it all. But if you like it, if you want more of it, it can't be too bad :D

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refisher January 3 2013, 01:11:06 UTC

I loved this!

The dialog for all characters was fantastic! I especially enjoyed Charlie's characterization. And finally, a do that writes Jasom/Nate both well and in character (though, to be fair, I haven't read any Jason-centric fics to compare to; he has always been secondary [like in the show].)

Your Jeremy is rather fun, and with how much I enjoyed this, it makes me want to prod you into writing Jeremy and Aaron in all their pop culture glory.

I hope you write more fic. :3

mustbethursday3 January 4 2013, 12:27:31 UTC

YAY ♥!

Omg dialog's my favorite part. You wouldn't believe how long I spent just typing and giggling to myself (like a nut).

I especially enjoyed Charlie's characterization. And finally, a do that writes Jasom/Nate both well and in character (though, to be fair, I haven't read any Jason-centric fics to compare to; he has always been secondary [like in the show].)

Awwwwwwhhhh, that's one of the nicest things you can say to a writer. Characterization is a tough nut to crack. (Lol, Jasom...I don't remember who's fic it was calling Danny - 'Denny' but I want a fic now where no one (like: Monroe, Miles, Random people they meet along the way) can remember Danny's or Jason's names...or maybe just one where Miles calls them Jasom and Denny...until Charlie makes him stop ( ... )

boutondor January 3 2013, 19:31:38 UTC

I'm finally able to get on Livejournal. After I posted my gift (which was a nightmare to post), LJ wouldn't let me back in.

Firstly, I was a little afraid of the term "crack" because I hate crack fics but... OMG I LOVED THIS! It's definitely not a crack fic. The humour is brilliant. I loved all characters and yay at Maggie being alive. I want more! I love this universe you've created. It's brilliant. Jeremy was hilarious. Oh and there wasn't too much Danny or Rachel, which I really liked because I don't really like either of them.

Anyway, thank you so much. I really, really loved it. Such a fabulous gift. I am so lucky!

mustbethursday3 January 4 2013, 12:45:52 UTC

YAY. THE PERSON I WROTE FOR \o/

I haven't had the same LJ problems as everyone else, so I thought maybe you just hadn't had time to read it. Good to know it wasn't by choice :D

Firstly, I was a little afraid of the term "crack" because I hate crack fics

OH MY. I'm the exact opposite.

Although my version of crack is quite ill defined. To me crack is anything that hasn't got all it's corners straight, the plot just runs, there's not a lot of set up - you just throw the readers into it and go SWIM GUYS, WELCOME TO THIS UNIVERSE. And the impossible, the unlikely, can and will happen. There's less introspection and refection by the characters, they tend to be all action, or mostly talk...you know. And you can go, look everyone's an astronaut or everyone's in high school damn the age differences social differences or time period, or whatever ( ... )

boutondor January 4 2013, 13:20:48 UTC

I seriously had so much trouble with LJ. Just posting my own stuff took me hours. Not even exaggerating and I had to try 5 times to post the comment above. Ugh, LJ can be such a pain ( ... )

ivy_b January 3 2013, 20:53:32 UTC

ngl, I had to reread the beginning a few times to wrap my head around this universe's history. But I loved it! Maggie being alive and awesome, Charlie being such a little!Miles with her badass-ness and snark (and I'll bet she's Monroe's little princess). I love her basically tricking Miles to come and save the Republic. I love your Jeremy and him being such a lovable uncle and calling her 'kitten' all the time. Now I kinda wish you'd continue it, cause I'm dying to see the Miles/Bass reunion, Bass' thoughts on Miles/Charlie and see how different their dynamic is, now that Miles isn't Bass; whole universe.

mustbethursday3 January 4 2013, 13:05:50 UTC

Rereading's cool, I can admit I didn't give it the smoothest set up - I jumped around a bit in time periods and such.

But I loved it! Maggie being alive and awesome, Charlie being such a little!Miles with her badass-ness and snark (and I'll bet she's Monroe's little princess).

Heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. *wipes brow* Good. Lol, I was hoping you would, after all my whining I probably couldn't get away with posting something that's rubbish. And I love that description of Charlie, coz she kinda is - and I wasn't even trying to portray that.

...And now I very much want to write Charlie and Bass properly - the dynamics between a parent and an adult child can be so complicated...I love the idea of him adoring her though, and her knowing just how hard to push him.

I love her basically tricking Miles to come and save the Republic. I love your Jeremy and him being such a lovable uncle and calling her 'kitten' all the time.Me too. I like the idea that's she's honest, but not in a way that you can tell immediately what she ( ... )

ivy_b January 10 2013, 15:52:10 UTC

There's snow, I'm bored, I've been home for two days, I might as well respond to this slightly old reply. LOL We haven't had snow in Jerusalem for like 3 years and this much snow we probably haven't had in about 20 years.

Heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. *wipes brow* Good. Lol, I was hoping you would, after all my whining I probably couldn't get away with posting something that's rubbish. And I love that description of Charlie, coz she kinda is - and I wasn't even trying to portray that.

...And now I very much want to write Charlie and Bass properly - the dynamics between a parent and an adult child can be so complicated...I love the idea of him adoring her though, and her knowing just how hard to push him.I never for a moment thought this would be rubbish, just judging from our conversations. I think what you meant was "I wasn't consciously trying to portray her that way, but obviously I thought about it subconsciously and will take full credit for it ( ... )