Fic: Eulogy

[nfe_gremlin]

Title: Eulogy
Author: turkeyish
Recipient: caramelsilver
Rating: G
Possible Spoilers/Warnings: None
Summary: "My brothers," Susan says quietly at the funeral, "were always two bodies, one soul."

Comments

[animus_wyrmis]

Oooooh, this is gorgeous. I love the way you give these little glimpses of them, but it lets us see the bigger picture. And they're brothers! They're so close, they're fantastic. And I love how even though they're different, it's not differences that divide them--they can have these differences because they're so close, they can share everything.

“Isn’t it funny to think,” Peter says into the comfortable silence, “that we’ll always be kings?”

“No,” Edmund replies easily. He can just glimpse the smoke of the train in the distance. Finally, his mind sighs. Hold on, Narnia. “We’ll always be brothers.”
!!!!!!!!!! I loooove this, it's so perfect, it's so them. This works so well with PC, when Ed's so worried Peter will die. <3333

That last line! :D :D :D :D :D

[turkeyish]

thank you so much! i'm glad you liked it. :D

[katakokk]

Oh. Oh.

Oh this is so beautiful and absolutely heartwrenching! And I love that there's this quirky humor to it, but at the same time it's tinged over with so much SADNESS that makes me want to just take the both of them and hug them very, very tight.

And the repetition! The shadow back to the whole night & day thing, and how both Peter and Edmund dismiss it as something silly.

Also, THE GALMANS. I LOVE THEM. ♥

“What did you expect me to do?” Edmund asks, the epitome of innocence. “Eat my law book?”

OH EDMUND. SUCH A BOY. *wibbles*

I love these guys. Because they are such brothers and you write them PERFECTLY.

AWESOME POSSUM. <333333 (yes, i just went there)

[turkeyish]

OMG I SAY AWESOME POSSUM ALL THE TIME AND EVERYONE JUST LOOKS AT ME WEIRD. BUT YOU'RE AWESOME POSSUM FOR USING IT. :D

thank you, bb! i'm happy you liked it!

[westingturtle]

Mirrors! Reflections! Candy-stealing!

I think you hit all the right notes and more, and I love seeing them through their professors' eyes

[turkeyish]

thanks so much!

[zempasuchil]

This is WONDERFUL. I love how much you can do, how much you fit in here, with so few words. These short snippets pack quite the punch, and your characterizations are so so great - it's hilarious how you have them acknowledge the night/day comparison, how Edmund is so much more verbose (BEAUTIFULLY so, might I add; I love that part about the moon and stars at morning, and then how you transition to their fateful morning at the train station) than commanding High King Peter about it, and how they both repeatedly say the same things to each other - keep your chin up, we are the same, we are brothers, we are sinners but we carry on. What a poignant mix of funny (candy vs. law? I know which I'd pick XD) and sweet and just heartbreaking (the last line, of course). I am really, really glad I read this.

[turkeyish]

thanks so much! i'm really glad you liked this. :)

[snacky]

This is really, really good. The way that you set up the comparisons and the contrasts, and then make it clear that to Edmund and Peter, it makes no difference, was really well done.

I loved the ending - Edmund's little prayer, Peter's passing temptation, and then Susan's eulogy - they all built to the perfect end.

Thanks for sharing this!

[turkeyish]

thank you for reading and commenting! i'm glad you liked it.