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Mischief Managed ♦ Fic: Concrete

Mar 09, 2011 09:42

Title: Concrete
Author: ohkaye
Pairing: Remus/Sirius
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1,014
Prompt: 124. Brothers on a Hotel Bed, Death Cab for Cutie
Warnings: None.
Summary: A night in Remus' house leads to memory and the asking of questions long avoided.
Author's Notes: I am a sucker for a happy ending, even when it appears no part of the prompt lends itself to ( Read more... )

submission: fic, length: 1k-5k, fest: mm, rating: pg, p: remus/sirius

Comments 13

brighty18 March 9 2011, 16:53:05 UTC

OH... MY... GAWD, but that was beautiful. Siriusy beautiful. I think I've read it over and over like four times just because it was so gorgeous.

Your prose, Mystery Author, is so lush and poetic, your narrative voice so entrancing. It was one of those stories in which I want to just want to quote the whole thing back, in which each passage seems more lovely than the next.

I love the way that their memories of the past were both beautiful (
Remember the motorbike - leather smell, musky and strong, sunlight above and rickety trees ahead. Remus with his nose dug into the nape of Sirius' neck, his laughter quivering against the fine hair under his collar until the wind snatched it away and flung it out behind them like brightly colored streamers, gleaming in their wake. Golden. And Remus with his arms outflung to match them, whooping when the bike left the asphalt with a little sizzle of rubber frisson before linking them in an impenetrable circle of trust around Sirius' waist.) and painful, but clearly paved the way for healing ( ... )

ohkaye May 3 2011, 03:42:04 UTC

This is such a late thank you but THANK YOU SO MUCH. Your comments on my works always make me so happy because I'm such a fan of yours <33

sukebe_miroku March 9 2011, 23:50:09 UTC

I think I just died. D: That was so... *dies* <3 <3 <3

ohkaye May 3 2011, 03:43:27 UTC

Thank you! I'm sorry I'm so late in responding, my semester has absolutely eaten me up <3

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ohkaye May 3 2011, 03:43:34 UTC

Thank you! I'm sorry I'm so late in responding, my semester has absolutely eaten me up <3

epithalamium March 10 2011, 02:54:15 UTC

and now here he is in front of him again explaining exactly how well he still knows him after all this time and all this space, and it is this more than anything else that convinces Remus they can mend it

Oh god, yes. This is how I always imagine them to be. Changed, yes, broken, maybe, but still instrinsically together, as if they couldn't help it. This was beautiful!!

ohkaye May 3 2011, 03:43:52 UTC

Thank you so much, my love! I always get a little thrill when you like my things xo

eprime March 10 2011, 16:12:53 UTC

Bittersweet, yes, but Sirius is wonderful here cutting past all of Remus' baggage. Lovely.

ohkaye May 3 2011, 03:44:46 UTC

Thank you so much :3 I'm sorry I'm so late in responding, my semester has absolutely eaten me up <3