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Fic: To See Clearly

Sep 03, 2010 22:49

Title: To See Clearly
Author: shimotsuki
Rating & Warnings: PG, mild profanity
Prompt: Auror, Peruvian Darkness Powder, drama
Format & Word Count: Fic, 4293 words

Summary: Remus risks his position in the pack, and maybe even his life, in a final attempt to stop Greyback's werewolves from aligning with the Death Eaters. And it seems he may be making another ( Read more... )

shimotsuki, angst, drama, summer hallows jumble

Comments 15

gilpin25 September 12 2010, 22:18:06 UTC

The only fault with this fic is it ending where it does! Never mind leaving the reader wanting more, this particular one needs to find out what happens when Bess gets the spectacles, may not forgive you if my favourite OC Matthias comes to any harm, and as for Remus and Tonks being only days away from you-know-what at Hogwarts... I really think you should have made this a two-parter, to put me out of my misery ( ... )

shimotsuki September 13 2010, 03:42:20 UTC

Sorry about inflicting misery, lol, but it makes me very happy to hear you're interested enough in the characters and the pack dynamics to want to know more. :) (And writing this just may have caused me to move the hospital-wing fic higher up on the WIP list...even though it scares me!)

I really wanted to show that both Remus and Tonks are very close to their respective breaking points here, to get them well set up for the coming confrontation. But I did also want to show that they are still keeping up with their various responsibilities, and not sliding completely into despair, because they're both the kind of people who keep fighting.

Thank you so much for the words of interest and encouragement. :) (And don't worry too hard about Matthias -- he's a very adaptable Slytherin!)

jobey_in_error September 15 2010, 02:59:22 UTC

"And this was, of course, completely ridiculous. Surely there was no difference at all between having a friend he never saw, because he was away on this accursed mission, and having someone he never saw who must no longer be called a friend."

*headbang* Oh dear God, Remus. Spare my poor head a bit. I can't entirely bring it to believe you're that stupidThis was a great job with both of them, though. They're under so much personal stress -- the line "She was just so tired" made me want to hug her myself, and Remus is driving himself almost mental -- but they're still Lupin and Tonks, and still they fight and stay on their toes. Which is awesome. (Though I think that, on the flip side of the coin, it's really disappointing -- but very telling -- that Remus lost it to the degree that he left before telling Tonks about the Powder, and that this had to be left to Matthias ( ... )

shimotsuki September 19 2010, 14:17:42 UTC

Oh dear God, Remus. Spare my poor head a bit.

Hee! I don't think he's doing a very good job of convincing himself, either.

Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm glad you thought the characters were still recognizable even in this kind of extreme emotional situation. And I'm happy you liked Bess (maybe when I revise this I should think about Matthias's characterization a little more, so thanks for the comment there too).

it's really disappointing -- but very telling -- that Remus lost it to the degree that he left before telling Tonks about the PowderOooh, I'm really happy that you picked up on that. I wanted to show that Remus is *this close* to losing his control completely, to the extent that it's starting to make him a little unprofessional (at least where there's no immediate danger concerned -- he can still focus when he's spying on Greyback!). In this ficverse, this is part of the buildup to Remus's change of heart after Dumbledore's death. I think it also fits in with the Harry argument scene in DH, another time when ( ... )

hooves January 30 2012, 06:05:44 UTC

Awww, this one was really good. He really snaps here, so that's a great leadup to DH I think.

And I do so love gardening even though it requires a lot of patience to make things grow. *Lol* All those months to wait for tomatoes nearly kills me every year!

But I absolutely CAN see Remus being the gardening-capable type!

Anyway, Matthias is again a great guy, though personally I might have expected he'd let off at the comment re: the muffler and not say more. It always seems awkward when people add their two cents in, if that makes...sense. But it didn't seem too bad for Matthias-- I think he's found a good pal in Remus. :D