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scarlett71177 in metamorfic_moon

A Thin Line

Oct 28, 2007 21:39

Title: A Thin Line
Author: scarlett71177
Rating & Warnings: G
Prompts: A Day of Hesitation, Essence of Murtlap, Drama/Angst, Location Prompt 32- Bedroom
Word Count: 1618
Summary: Remus contemplates going off to the final battle.

( The line between bravery and fear has become narrower every day over the last three years. )

angst, drama, all hallows' moon jumble, scarlett71177

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scarlett71177 October 29 2007, 05:04:12 UTC

Thank you so much, I'm glad YOU liked it.

Yes, I do think it was a catch-22 for Remus and Tonks, no matter what they chose it was right and/or wrong.

sugarannie October 29 2007, 07:58:39 UTC

You described the dilemma of the situation very well, and it just makes me wish more for a different outcome of the events that follow...

katyhasclogs October 29 2007, 12:45:47 UTC

Sob!

This was so beautiful and sad. Well done.

mrstater October 29 2007, 13:02:40 UTC

Agh, the heartbreak! How I wish we could have this sort of fics and revel in their bravery of making such decisions, and then get a happy ending?

That out of my system, this is really lovely. There are some really nice turns of phrase throughout this, and a lot of sweetness, and what really stands out to me is that Remus really seems peaceful here, even though he doesn't want to go, he wants to stay with his family. He's finally come to terms with his life and how to make it work and I think this is the perfect setup for how he and Tonks do both come to be lying so peacefully, as if they're sleeping.

The descriptions of Teddy are so great, too -- I love the details that his eyes have been trying to focus on people and he's smiling now. And Tonks saying of course he's good, he has perfect parents, is so her. And so true.

Great work. Even if I am sniffling into my oatmeal now. ;)

phoenixneal October 29 2007, 23:45:20 UTC

I'm not supposed to cry at work - it's not professional. But dangit... I can barely hold back the tears.

Thank you.