A King and Commoners Life (9/?)

[mayonaka_32]

Title: A King and Commoners Life (9/?)
Genre: Angst, Romance, Historic
Rating: R (for some chapters)
Warnings: Rape/Violence
Summary: Jonghyun is de crown prince of the ancient Goryeo. Kibum is a mere citizen, accused of one of the most detested things possible and made sure to pay for it with his life

Comments

[jongkey1999]

hayyyy gurl, spot!!!
im holidaying in Vietnam now, but when i get back, ill comment!!!

[mayonaka_32]

Wooow, feel honored that you spotted it! <3

Have an amzing holiday! And a safe trip back ^^ :D

Can't wait for your comment <3

[jongkey1999]

hayyy baby im here nowww
i noticed some grammatical errors along the way, but it's ok, English isn't your first language after all, i believe you can write beautifully in your native language anyway. it was kinda nice to know our baby pup is being the best king there is while ALSO being an absolute angel in real life, what with his support for the lgbt community. the homophobic losers should just go fuck themselves.
keep updating, baby, i'll be there for ya:)

[sluthyun]

oh my god this is brilliant, the flow of their feelings is so natural and realistic and this just WOW I LOVE THIS, i love the plot and the fact that there's going to be a war is making everything more interesting and wow i hope the next chapter will be there soon ;_;

[mayonaka_32]

Oh god I can cry at this /sobs
I really love your fics till death, and to receive such a nice comment really makes my day <3 Thank you ^^

I really try to keep it realistic, so I am happy that you see it ^^

I hope you will like the coming chapters, I am working hard on it ^^

Thank you again, and have an amazing day! <3

[stellabella1]

i really like the storyline it's interesting and keeps me reading ^^

[mayonaka_32]

Thank you so much <3

I hope you will like the future chapters too! :D

xx

wow!!!

[boosher89]

This is so freaking amazing!!! Historical dramas are my favorite so when I saw a Jongkey historical fic I squealed (I literally did my roommate came over to see if I was okay). This is really well written and the pace is perfect! I can't wait to see what happens next!!

Re: wow!!!

[mayonaka_32]

Let me hug you *hugs* /immediately making myself awkward/

I am a sucker for historical drama's, I was watching Faith when I started to think that I never saw a real historical fic, so then this idea started to plot in my head and I needed to write it ^^

I'm glad you find it well written, I am still very anxious about my writing since I lack so much language skills and everything T^T

I hope you will like the coming chapters too!

Thank you so much for commenting and have a great day <3

[ezri_sun]

I am greatly enjoying this story, and the pacing is doing well with some interesting turns. The only thing that really bothers me is some of your word choices at times. I am guessing that English is not your first language, but it wouldn't hurt to have someone look over your chapters before posting.

For example in an earlier chapter, they were discussing Kibum's parents being told kibum had been killed. You kept using the word death in places where dead or died should have been used. Death is a noun meaning the ACT of dying, dead is used for the state of death, while die is a verb for the act of death (died, dying etc). If that makes sense...

It is just something that is really bothering me, but can be easily fixed. I still am really enjoying this. It will be interesting to see what happens how that Jonghyun is more or less engaged, but his feelings for Kibum have surfaced.

[mayonaka_32]

Hello ^^
Thank you so much for commenting.

I am happy that you're enjoying it so far. ^^

I'm feeling really sorry that you're bothered by my lack of English skills. You're right that it isn't my first language. I'm thankful that you're pointing out those things, since I don't see them myself as I read it over.

I know my English is everything but perfect, but I always feel like a real bother to ask people to read it over. But I'll try to find someone that wants to ^^
Also, when I have time I will look over that part myself and try to fix it :)

Thank you really much for giving me criticism, since it helps me more than just a 'keep going' or something!

Again thank you for commenting, and I hope that you will like the coming chapters ^^

[ezri_sun]

No worries, if I didn't like what I read or it was too 'painful' to work through the responses I would have stopped reading and not commented. Also, I am an ESL teacher so I see these mistakes often.