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marlawentmad

The Real LJ Idol * 3 Strikes * Week 2: What Really Matters

Feb 20, 2022 20:07

The scent of clotted earth pressed around her. She gathered up her skirt and tied it higher, tucking the wet ends into her belt for better maneuverability. The bare undergrowth had thorns and sharp edges which kept catching at her, like a line of sentinels guarding her from the secret knowledge she sought. Her damp shoe slid unexpectedly on the ( Read more... )

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drippedonpaper February 24 2022, 01:59:14 UTC

Are you going to continue this world? It definitely is intriguing. It reminds me, just a bit of "The Grace Year", a book that is one of my current favorites.

The contrasts in your entry are amazing. Well done!

marlawentmad February 27 2022, 06:51:18 UTC

Thank you kindly! I haven't heard of that book. I appreciate a recommendation. I hadn't thought to return here specifically, but it wouldn't be out of the realm of possibility.

viagra February 25 2022, 15:14:14 UTC

I see this story both literally and metaphorically, and I think it works well either way. Your writing is so distinctive that I would have known this was yours even if I hadn't been told, which is just wonderful. I really enjoy how Hawthorne-esque your voice can be when it's in prose. :)

marlawentmad February 27 2022, 07:06:39 UTC

I'm amused by your assertion that you would have been able to pick this out as mine. Thank you for the generous feedback. I think I should revisit Hawthorne sometime. I had such a hard time with that work in my youth. What a wild compliment!

static_abyss February 27 2022, 00:10:18 UTC

This was so rich and full of wonderful imagery. Your descriptions of this rite of passage were glorious and sucked me into this world. Thank you for sharing.

marlawentmad February 27 2022, 23:46:32 UTC

Thank you for coming along into this world. I appreciate your comment.

itismeangied February 28 2022, 01:25:05 UTC

This ritual was so gorgeously written. It was so cathartic. I love that connections to ancestors can help us realize our own strength and comfort us.

marlawentmad March 1 2022, 23:15:43 UTC

Thank you kindly for that sweet feedback. As someone who hasn't felt connected to extended family for most of my life, ancestor work is an interesting concept to ponder.

d0gs February 28 2022, 02:04:42 UTC

i love how you describe everything so beautifully here - I can picture it all so clearly and it felt so real to me.

marlawentmad March 1 2022, 23:16:12 UTC

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I am so glad that what I am doing is working to ground you into the story.