Fic - Recall, Chapter 4

[ultharkitty]

Title: Recall, Chapter 4
Continuity: G1, Dysfunction AU
Rating: NC-17
Content advice: abduction, non-con, manipulation of various kinds including sexual, graphic violence, dark themes, bondage
Beta: naboru_narluin
Disclaimer: Just playing in the sandbox, characters not mine.
Characters: Vortex, First Aid, Stunticon ensemble
Summary: In which the guests leave

Comments

[mjfastlane]

Oh dear D:

That said, the fuzziness of the first grade for First Aid really came through for me, in that I sort of felt detached and a little numb at first but then the horror of that particular brand of helplessness really sort of caught up with me, and 'oh dear' became OHCRAPOHCRAPOHCRAP D:D:D:

And First Aid's holding his own so far, as much as he can in a situation like this, but starting to blame his team...? Yeah, colour me worried. Or, well, more worried than before. Knowing Vortex is manipulative doesn't mean he won't be susceptible to the manipulation all the same - or that it won't affect him even worse as a result of him knowing :|

So yeah, that's some powerful writing there - really well done. Aaannnddd I'm going to go look at pictures of puppies now, I think.

[ultharkitty]

Yeah, puppies are totally needed! (Alas, I have no puppies, but I have kittens in icon form instead, if that helps!)

Thankyou so much for the feedback :D I'm glad high grade wooziness/disassociation came through OK, and the vulnerability that goes with it. And wow, so very awesome that the writing has that effect :D :D :D

[caiusmajor]

Mmm, just as creepily sexy as the first time I read it! But you did an excellent job with the horror of First Aid's position, too.

[ultharkitty]

Thankyou! :D It's awesome how often 'creepy' and 'sexy' get mentioned side by side about my writing ;) I'm especially glad the horror of it comes through though.

[swindleslog]

Well, there went the inevitable. I didn't really believe Vortex would wait all that long before having his fun with First Aid. I doubt he thinks of what he did as rape or molestation though. Despite tying him up and not stopping when he was told no. That was more than just confusing signals between cultures.

Though he still doesn't want to physically (or mentally, but he's already failed on that one, I think) harm his autobot. So Vortex is taking out that energy elsewhere, instead of gettin frustrated with First Aid. Small blessing, I suppose.

You’re perfect. I was so right about you

Creepy. So creepy. That phrase really kind of strikes me as Vortex not considering first Aid as a person. Not really. He's like art, or something fleeting.

[ultharkitty]

Inevitable indeed, Vortex has no patience. But he can convince himself that he's still being patient as they didn't actually interface (the mindgames he plays with himself).

He might be putting it across that he doesn't want to harm his Autobot, but he knows exactly what he's doing. With any luck, the dissonance between what Vortex says he intends and what he actually intends will come across more forcefully as things progress.

Creepy. So creepy. That phrase really kind of strikes me as Vortex not considering first Aid as a person. Not really. He's like art, or something fleeting. I'm so happy that line works - it took weeks of searching for the creepiest non-threatening thing Vortex could say in that situation before I finally settled on it. :D And yes, absolutely, like art, and absolutely not like a thinking, feeling person.

[gwenithcoy]

[ultharkitty]

Yay, thankyou! :D

Creepy-sexy, my favourite mix. ;) (Which kinda indicates where the plot is going next, really. Not that we've hit much plot yet :P)

[spacehussy]

WHERE TO EVEN BEGIN <333333

I know I've said this before but I love how smoothly this transitions from being really funny and kind of cute (albeit in a dark way) to ... well, rape! Just - ffffffffff, Vortex saying "my" Autobot, and like what Swindleslog said earlier, First Aid is not an individual, he's a possession. It's so wrong and I enjoy it a lot :D

“He’s here.” Wildrider lifted First Aid’s arm and waggled his fingers. “Look, he’s waving.”

... I laughed. Then felt really bad, especially over the idea of First Aid getting drunk in the hopes he'll forget. The bit about "is that an invitation" outright gave me chills. Not to mention, I really like how when Vortex finally starts to touch him, the gentleness is the cruelest part. Pretty much everything Vortex says to First Aid is INSANELY HOT to me so I won't bother c/ping all of it but this, oh:

“Because,” Vortex said, “You’re perfect. I was so right about you.” GUH. And then asking First Aid to fix his rotors, and opening up about sensory deprivation, almost conversationally?

[ultharkitty]

If I grinned any wider, the top of my head might fall off. So pleased that this part works for you! (which gives me hope for the rest of part 1 :P)

when Vortex finally starts to touch him, the gentleness is the cruelest part And damn, but I am SO happy that this stuck out :D And the dialogue too. As I said above, that took so long to figure out.

Trust Vortex to wear the key to breaking him so very openly. :D