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lori_leaf

Supernatural Fic: Exchange Rate

Mar 10, 2009 20:41

Title: "Exchange Rate"
Author: lori_leaf
Beta: liselisa
Rating: R
Genre: Gen AU
Summary: There's something funny going on in those woods. Dean goes in as a 26 year old hunter and comes out as a traumatized 7 year old. What John can't figure out is how a 7 year old learned how to draw a perfect Devils Trap when his Dean has never seen one before.

( It was supposed to be a simple recon mission. Dean didn’t even go at night for fuck’s sake! He tramped out to the woods at two o’clock in the afternoon. That's a downright embarrassing time to go missing. )

supernatural, fic

Comments 39

scourgeofeurope March 11 2009, 01:09:40 UTC

Awesome beyond reason.
Tiny feral Dean was perfect, right down to the repetitive submissive pissing. :( Poor kid.

And poor John, who knows he's a good daddy but aware that he's so utterly not somewhere else. And Sammy and his bitten hand.

I loved how you cleanly wrapped it up with a sacrifice at the end. :D Although I still feel like hounding you to make a new a verse involving wee feral Dean and his attempts to overcome his wee feral trauma.

I loved this! <3

lori_leaf March 11 2009, 01:15:24 UTC

People would kill me if I attempted to juggle two verses. I'm already notoriously bad at updating my ONE verse. Poor Fox verse. I promise I'll write more of you soon. I actually started a mini story in Fox verse yesterday, I just haven't you know... finished it... or written more then a paragraph on it... *facepalm*

I'm glad you enjoyed this. Feral Dean was an image I couldn't get out of my head.

minx999 March 11 2009, 01:46:49 UTC

You rock, woman! You wrote and posted! YAY.

Wee Dean punching John in the nose when John bends down to talk to him. OMG - that is SO Winchester! Just perfect!

Your imagery and characterizations are spot on. I felt John's tiredness, saw clearly the woods. Loved how although Dean was a child, he still had the skills he'd been taught throughout life and knew to draw a devil's trap, knew how to try to fight when John grabbed him. But then, you draw us back to the fact that he's just a scared child when he pees himself in fright. My heart just broke over how feral Dean was and how torn up both John and Sam were, trying to gain Dean's trust. And then that horrible quiet realization at the end that they wouldn't be able to save that little boy Dean. So heart breaking.

The whole plot idea was so cool and I was sort of bummed when the story ended so soon. Take that as a compliment. I wanted more. :)

Fabulous job with this.

lori_leaf March 11 2009, 02:05:19 UTC

Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! I really faught with myself on how to end this. I knew exactly how to BEGIN this, but I struggled with wanting to give them a happy ending verses wanting to give them a solid ending. I ended up going with a clear exchange.

And I'm really glad you liked feral Dean. He definitely was a survivor, but also a completely and utterly terrified kid.

Thanks again for the lovely comment. *g*

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lori_leaf March 11 2009, 10:06:54 UTC

Thanks Shea! *g*

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lori_leaf March 11 2009, 13:33:35 UTC

Thank you! I absolutely positively LOVE your fic, especially for it's viseral qualities so it's a huge compliment for me that you enjoy what I write.

I got it stuck in my head that Dean would be from a world where his mom died, Sammy "died", and his dad got chosen as the face for the monster who killed them. This explains why the next story I wrote is nothing but reaffirming fluff. (By the way I found myself awake at a stupidly early hour so I wrote Fox 'verse. *g*)

liselisa March 11 2009, 11:27:50 UTC

You already know how I feel, but hooray!! I'm glad to see it and read it again.

lori_leaf March 11 2009, 12:31:07 UTC

I tried to encorporate as many of your notes as possible. I really appreciate the help! *g* Thank you!

smokeyhorse March 11 2009, 15:33:51 UTC

AWE. SOME.

This was made of perfect! I've gotta admit, though...I was hoping for a 'verse LOL. I was having visions of the 3 of them with wee feral!Dean.

But anyway, fantastic job!!

lori_leaf March 11 2009, 16:18:41 UTC

It was hard to resist the urge to make it a verse. Very hard. But I figured people would kill me if I tried to juggle two verses at once.

I dunno. Maybe I'll write another one shot someday with feral Dean with no rhyme or reason. He'll just show up and no one will question it. Who needs logical plot threads when you have wee feral Dean? *g*

Thanks for the feedback, hon!