[01] Y en A un de Trop

[lemon_skies]

Y en A un de Trop (there is one too many)
Rating: R
Word Count: 4216w
Warnings Forced prostitution and dubcon. Read with discretion.
Summary: When Kibum signed his name on his first SM contract, he thought his dreams were finally coming true. However, he was not warned of the one aspect of becoming an idol.
a/n: This fic was painfully hard to

Comments

[23elevens]

THIS. <3
It makes me wonder, just a little, if by any chance any SM idol has been treated like this, especially the five shining boys.
You write beautifully ASDFGHJKL, I kind of teared at the last line ;_; please make a sequel and keep Kibum safe! ):
I'm random but, I love this. Hwaiting ^^

[lemon_skies]

Thank you for reading :) I most likely won't write a sequel to this story. I'm not sure if I can because it took a lot of effort and hand holding from my friends to get this out. I also probably wouldn't because it wouldn't be realistic to have a happy ending? But you never know, maybe I'll work on it later down the line.

[23elevens]

Haha, but I think you did in the end, right? (': The likes of this fic and this itself is fucking awesome {Y} Thanks for posting this!

[lemon_skies]

I actually didn't write a sequel, I just posted a deleted scene from this. But in no ways does that have a happy ending. :(

Thanks again for reading ♥

[mickyart]

O I'm crying so hard right now. But this story is quite exquisite, the irony is piercing so deep with the last line

[lemon_skies]

Thank you! Aw, don't cry ;;

[kheey]

i felt so slow.. i don't understand the last part after taemin returnes home T.T
but this is really great :) i love this

thanks for sharing :3

[lemon_skies]

thank you for reading :3

what part? the dialogue between kibum and taemin? or the section after where key is with the men?

[stupidbakau]

I seriously love how you write out the whole story, so beautiful. really...
With every member's POV.
I'm like woahhh...
I'm glad at least Jinki tried to help even if it went in vain.
Taemin finally knew it, I was like omg omg omg

"Let’s escape from this nightmare,” murmured Taemin.

I couldn’t help but believe him.

I went like OMG OMG OMG FUUU~ I seriously love this part. Kibum couldn't help to believe to believe Taemin... AWWWW XDDD

When I reached the last line.

“Hello I am the Almighty Key from SHINee. Thank you for the hard work."

Ironic, really painful and all >.<
I really love this story XDD
Thanks for sharing!! :D

[lemon_skies]

thank you for reading! i was worried that the different member povs would be confusing. i'm glad you liked it this!

[linnhe]

The boy’s normally pale face was tainted a flush red, lips swollen from agitated biting, and expressive eyes overflowing with fire. The Representative smiled to himself - the boy was simply exquisite.
I think it works so well that you added in a paragraph from the representative's pov, it really brings forward how little he thinks of Key

I like all the things you expanded on, the atmosphere in the restaurant is so much more menacing now

Kibum smiled tiredly and reached out to ruffle the younger boy’s bangs. He winced and withdrew his hand suddenly, as if burned; the thought of where his fingers were and what they were doing hours before made his stomach lurch.
this is still one of my favourite lines
Key's pain is just seeping through the screen

“Don’t touch my scarf, it’s dirty and needs to be washed.” He said, backing away.
this works really well, I'm glad you added this
it's so double too

btw you shouldn't have worried about the pov changes at all, they work just fine

Every time on the way to a hotel, restaurant or club, I

[lemon_skies]

sobs at your comment. i don't know how to possibly even respond to this. ;~~; thank you so much for you support and holding my hand through this.

i was so terrible to key in this, i toyed with the idea of making a happy ending, but it just wouldn't fit with the depressing topic i was dealt with.

[linnhe]

I was happy to hold your hand <3 you just needed someone to tell you you're awesome haha

YOU ARE
GO FORTH AND SPROUT FICCAGE AND MAKE US ALL HAPPY

[lemon_skies]

IDK WHAT TO WRITE ABOUT NOW

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