[fanfiction] human/cyborg relations (section 3)

Jun 12, 2011 21:04

365 Gay Sharks
Day 174, Word Count: 9565
Theme: June; No More Sad Songs
This post is part of the 365 Gay Sharks project. If you would like to learn more about this project, click here to read more about it. :D

Fell in love with an Android, baby, playing games with the toy that played me. Electricity is easy, I'm told-so where'd you ever learn to be so cold? )

fandom: the social network, #paprika, verse: 8bit heart, pairing: eduardo/mark, # garlic, !fic, length: over 10k, beasties 2011: 365 gay sharks, # salsa

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anonymous June 18 2011, 22:26:48 UTC
This was so lovely and original and I really, really enjoyed your world building. Now the only thing I wonder about is - what happened to the fryer?

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kisforkurama June 19 2011, 04:57:44 UTC
The story of the fryer
"A fryer is not a legitimate tax write-off, Mark."
Mark frowns, "You said anything that I bought to accomodate Eduardo can be counted. I bought him a fryer."
Chris lowers the print-out and stares at Mark, "Eduardo has a fryer, Mark. You didn't need to buy him a new one."
"Yes I did. His previous fryer met an untimely end."

Mark's not actually paying that much attention to Chris, instead running diagnostics from his computer. Chris clears his throat, and Mark resurfaces totally, glaring.

Chris glares back, "What did you do to the fryer?"
"It was picking fights with the fridge and the fridge was taking it out on Eduardo, so I had to get a nicer fryer."

There's not even a hint of joking to Mark's tone, and if Chris didn't know better, then he'd think Mark was just a very good actor. As it is, though, he knows Mark's completely serious so he just sighs and keeps the fryer on Mark's tax return.

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zoetrope13 June 18 2011, 22:42:25 UTC
I LOVED THIS SO MUCH. IT WAS INCREDIBLY WELL DONE. LOVED ALL THE QUOTES TOO.

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kisforkurama June 19 2011, 04:58:47 UTC
My favorite part was totally picking quotes. :D

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! ♥

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treelines June 19 2011, 08:35:11 UTC
Oh my gosh, my heart just grew three thousand sizes. This is beautiful and understated, and emotional even in its clinical verbiage. I am looking forward to re-reading this, but also really intrigued and investing in this universe. I would read any number of fics set in this timeline if you chose to write them. This is a really intriguing, insanely rich playground you've created, and your characters are authentic and fascinating. I really enjoyed reading this and hope I see more from you soon!

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kisforkurama June 20 2011, 11:30:39 UTC
There's more word documents in a folder! . . . Granted, most of them are .txt files containing meta and other stuff, but there's some partially-written fic in there too for after I finish some of the stuff that's been hanging around longer. Anyway ♥ and thank you for reading. :D

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creature_of_ian June 19 2011, 12:07:48 UTC
THIS IS AWESOME! Mark actually seems a lot more empathetic towards others here than in canon (the whole "Erica is a bitch" thing notwithstanding). He also isn't so single-mindedly focused on facebook. Wonder if it's just b/c he's older here or if the machines actually taught him something. Also, awww @ Tyler refreshing FB compulsively.

Really like how you used the formatting, esp. when Eduardo was stealing Facebook (damn, that's a weird sentence). It gives a sense of the speed, is interesting, yet still very readable :D

And I love all the quotes, the Douglas Adams ones in particular <3

LMFAO at Eduardo's poor fryer not getting along w/ Mark's fridge. JSYK, I'm so down w/ more stories in this universe.

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kisforkurama June 20 2011, 12:17:42 UTC
Wonder if it's just b/c he's older here or if the machines actually taught him something.
Well, in a sense, the machines taught him that if he's nice to them then they'll be nice to him and this Mark lives in a world where computers are people and people are computers so he mostly applies the same principle to dealing with people except backwards. If people are nice to him, then he's nice to them. Or he tries to be, anyway.

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Epic comment of doom 3a des_pudels_kern June 20 2011, 00:45:08 UTC
Guess who didn't go to bed? Yeah.

"Nope," Mark grabs another form, "They try to discourage it."
And note how it's paper paperwork. Not even forms he can fill out on his computer. If that isn't love (or the desire to have that really, really good sex again)…

Eduardo could probably listen in on them if he felt like it, but he figures it's none of his business what they're saying. That doesn't mean he's deaf, though, so he can't really help hearing it when they start yelling.
Oh, can he dial his hearing up? (Well, and also down, in which case he'd be able to not hear when they start screaming, but he didn't go out of his way to listen in, so I guess he's done his duty, their own fault if they start yelling.)

He looks at Mark, takes in the way that Mark is pointedly avoiding looking at him and remembers when they integrated, the feeling of being one singular being for a brief second, and tries not to blush. Between getting a tracker installed and moving in with someone he doesn't know all that well, Eduardo is pretty sure that moving ( ... )

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Epic comment of doom 3b des_pudels_kern June 20 2011, 00:46:38 UTC
He hadn't taken it to his apartment, always worried that something would happen to it, but he wants it now.
Because now he has a home! D'awwwww!

Chris walks over and puts a hand on his shoulder
I knew woobiness would be the way to Chris' heart.

I may not think you deserve it
…Chris. Come on. There's a time for honesty, and this is not it. Shame on you.

On arriving
Mark waiting in front of the house, how… adorable? Slightly desperate, but adorable in its fretting. And Eduardo, so lost, with no idea what he's supposed to do.

two are occupied
One for Mark, one for his computers?

I'm usually doing two or three things at once when I'm working from here, so it's helpful to be able to physically move between the computers.
Yes, Eduardo, your new house mate is a multitasking, almost-insomniac workaholic. Welcome to your new life.

It's got its own bathroom though, and Eduardo is selfish.And I think he really needs some safe spaces right now. His life has fallen apart, and he's completely at Mark's mercy, having his own bathroom can at ( ... )

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Epic comment of doom 3c des_pudels_kern June 20 2011, 00:48:20 UTC
And I like you too much to let you go, Mark wants to say. He doesn't though
*headdesks*

"Sorry. I'm just not used to people spontaneously touching me." - "You can't control it," Eduardo says slowly, "can you?"
Mark is so lucky Eduardo is beginning to pick up on these things and doesn't take this as rejection.

and I think this is probably a bad idea
No, it's not. As long as you talk afterwards, yeah?

"It's fine. We're clean."
…Do I even want to know how he knows that? Did he steal a blood sample from Eduardo and have it tested? Which, actually, is something he'd do.

Mark touches their foreheads together, and Eduardo is enveloped in the secure knowledge that everything will be okay. It's hard to separate it out from his own feelings, and the only reason Eduardo knows it isn't him at all is that it disappears when Mark pulls away again.
I kind of love forehead touching a lot. A lot. There's just something about it, about the close, chaste tenderness… like it means so much more because it's more emotion and less sex.

"It's not ( ... )

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Epic comment of doom 3d des_pudels_kern June 20 2011, 00:49:58 UTC
I'm thinking about majoring in programming or forensic
Look, he'd be such an asset for the CIA!

I want to get to know you the right way.
How cute, they are finally pretending to be talking to each other properly!

*happy sigh*

Okay, I really have to go to bed now, and there are probably all kinds of typos and unfinished half-sentences everywhere, because it's really late, but I wanted to finish this, and I kept wanting to say things, and reading while typing up comments takes so much longer than just reading. Anyway. I love this, I adore them, and this 'verse is just fantastic. Good night, and sorry for the comment spammage.

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