Freezing Rain - Pioggia Gelida [name edited]

[kirishimaayama]

Comments

[mirachiii]

Well I didn't see any mistakes but I have to say this was a really good fic. Even better than the usual ones I read.

[kirishimaayama]

Welll, there are some mistakes logic-wise, I think. T_T; Like with his katana... but yeah. ^^; I could be thinking too much into it. >.>;
Thanks for reading! ^^; <3 *hugs*

[mirachiii]

you're welcome~! :)

[ch1ps0h0y]

I have to echo the words of the person above me. I usually don't read much of your 8059 etc. O=

<3

[kirishimaayama]

^^; Well, there are mistakes logic-wise. T_T
I totally cannot interpret "Squaring the accounts and washing away the blood spilled, the Requiem Rain" ...
This one's only very subtle 8059, hehe...

[ch1ps0h0y]

Ahaha...well...if you fix it ignore that then it's ()b! XD

Hmm, maybe that's why I like it more... XD"

[kirishimaayama]

Eh, come on, I thought I did a reasonable job in the end, after bashing my head against a metaphorical brick wall. T_T

I should do that more I guess? ^_^'

[melissa_42]

I loooove angsty Yama! Thanks for sharing!

[kirishimaayama]

Very angsty. xD No problem. Thanks for reading and commenting! :D

[f_m_shorty]

As mistakes I found only three:
he would get to that when neCCessary
There was a presCence behind him.
Yamamoto wEIlded his two katanas.

Aaand the italian translation for freezing rain is 'pioggia gelida', 'congelamento pioggia' is 'freeze/frostbite rain', lawl.

And I liked it, the ending overall. It was so sad for the girl... ç-ç

[kirishimaayama]

Oops. =_=;
Ahaha, that's why you need to come and correct me earlier. :P Thanks for the Italian. =A=;; /epic fail was epic.

:( Yeah. >.>;;;; I feel bad for that now...