Oh, you evil evil person, how dare you criticize my title! It's thematic and it relates to imagery of Draco! Great, now I'm gonna be second guessing that damn title...
geez, I didnt even notice a title...just went, ooo, kc wrote something! And dashed over to read. Happy I did...though Dark!Harry isnt one of my favs, at least he wasnt a Voldy-copy. I like this a whole lot, and yeah, if you can, try extending it to a two parter. *Grin*
I must be evil, 'cause whenever I think dark!Harry, I think he and Hermione and Ron could probably do a better job running things than the Ministry. So what's a little murderous suppression of dissent? XD
The sound of trickling water joined the crying as he walked closer. At the far end of the hallway, he climbed over a few large slabs of broken marble that had jutted up from the floor and gazed at the smashed remains of the Ministry's fountain. The centaur's human part stood cracked in half and a spell had melted the wizard into a lump as low as the jagged remains of the elf. Water spurted weakly every which way from the bent spouts, drenching the floor, the rubble, and the many bodies surrounding the fountain. I really like this imagery. Really creepy.
After a second glance, he realized it wasn't an angel, but whoever it was had wings set in the middle of his back, the feathers dirty and streaked with mud. Whether his robes had been torn off or if he simply couldn't wear a shirt because of those wings, Harry wasn't sure. Face down with his head buried in his arms, the angel curled up and extended a wing over his shoulder and head, trying to hide. Harry stood entranced for a moment, watching the bones move
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writers love critics when they're complimentarykc_anathemaMarch 16 2006, 03:18:47 UTC
Kewlies! I'll switch the 'Ron and Hermione' thing and give it a couple more proofs just to make sure I didn't miss anything, and fire it off.
I wasn't even thinking about the H/Hr thing, I just figured that if Harry ever asks questions, he'd rather ask her than look anything up. She's like his personal internet.
Re: writers love critics when they're complimentarya_white_rainMarch 16 2006, 03:23:16 UTC
It's just you connected it with sex. And that happens so much in canon, it's sad. He looked at Hermione right after kissing Ginny. Even your gay Harry wants Hermione. XD
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But, 'Angels Fallen'
PLZ tell me that there is a GOOD SOLID reason that you're using such a terrible title.
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I'm wary to read Draco-as-a-veela fic in the first place (bad memories from DT), but that title? Sucks. I wouldn't tell you if I didn't respect you.
It makes me think of Blink 182 song fics with Draco cutting himself cause his father beats and rapes him and that Harry Potter doesn't lurve him.
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The sound of trickling water joined the crying as he walked closer. At the far end of the hallway, he climbed over a few large slabs of broken marble that had jutted up from the floor and gazed at the smashed remains of the Ministry's fountain. The centaur's human part stood cracked in half and a spell had melted the wizard into a lump as low as the jagged remains of the elf. Water spurted weakly every which way from the bent spouts, drenching the floor, the rubble, and the many bodies surrounding the fountain.
I really like this imagery. Really creepy.
After a second glance, he realized it wasn't an angel, but whoever it was had wings set in the middle of his back, the feathers dirty and streaked with mud. Whether his robes had been torn off or if he simply couldn't wear a shirt because of those wings, Harry wasn't sure. Face down with his head buried in his arms, the angel curled up and extended a wing over his shoulder and head, trying to hide. Harry stood entranced for a moment, watching the bones move ( ... )
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I wasn't even thinking about the H/Hr thing, I just figured that if Harry ever asks questions, he'd rather ask her than look anything up. She's like his personal internet.
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