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Prov 32 || Shippou

Sep 06, 2009 11:55

Title: How Do You Get Someone to Love You?
Author: Sensei
Words: 450
Rating: T
Characters: Shippou, Inu-tachi, and guest appearance by Toutousai
Summary: Shippou seeks advice on finding love.
Warnings: Toutousai is a dirty old man (but I promise he doesn't touch Shippo and it's truly T-rated).
Author's Note: I am extremely grateful to knittingknots for wisely ( Read more... )

salomesensei, prov 32

Comments 11

kiramaru7 September 6 2009, 17:12:12 UTC

*giggles* Poor Shippou-chan! I hope he's not scarred for life! XD

salomesensei September 6 2009, 17:26:32 UTC

You're a honey. Thanks for reading this. As you know, with such a chibi of a character, this one took serious effort to get to the funny!

kiramaru7 September 6 2009, 17:33:54 UTC

*blushes* No you are! You're welcoem! The chibis are hard to make funny, You tend to want go "Awe... how cute!!" with them, ather than see them as comic relief. ;p

You did it though & that's what counts! :D

salomesensei September 6 2009, 17:38:57 UTC

Excellent point. This fic kept heading for fluff. Toutousai helped it stay on track, thanks to KK's idea (which I forgot to credit and am editing in right now!).

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knittingknots September 6 2009, 17:35:51 UTC

Ah, well done, Sensei...I love Toutousai...He's trying to get me to let him out to play today...LOL. I lurves how it turned out...

salomesensei September 6 2009, 17:42:16 UTC

Ok, now please go reread where I put in the proper author's note of thanks. Did not mean to seem ungrateful for your timely and perfect assistance ~ just didn't post the A/N I wrote til now. Gaaak.

knittingknots September 6 2009, 18:24:24 UTC

You do know that wouldn't have bothered me at all...cause the mental pic was so fun...

salomesensei September 6 2009, 18:32:01 UTC

I appreciate your generosity, but heaven knows if I'd even HAVE a story without that fabulous suggestion. :)

kingbaka22 September 7 2009, 04:04:15 UTC

"Alright, Totosai!" *strangles old man* "Surrender your secrets! How do you get 6 naked beautiful women to join you in a hot tub?!"

Ahem...sorry, got a little carried away there. Alas, Shippo, you could have had a great learning experience. By the time you realize what an accomplishment that was Totosai won't be able to remember how he achieved it! Great job with this piece.

salomesensei September 7 2009, 16:56:13 UTC

Thank you! Toutousai is da man.