Fanfic: The Brief Taste Of Happiness [Finch, Reese & Leila]

[hotch_fan]

Title: The Brief Taste Of Happiness.
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Comments

[rose_griffes]

Lovely work; it's a fitting episode insert.

[hotch_fan]

Thanks so much!

[melawen_c]

Aww. *loves* This is wonderful!!

[hotch_fan]

Thanks! I'm glad you like it :D

[brickhousewench]

Awww, so sweet! I wondered why no one had written a post with Sleeping!Reese and baby for that ep yet.

And for English not being your first language? I've seen native speakers who didn't write as well as you do. These aren't criticisms, but I'm assuming you want to improve your English? It's a difficult and non-entirely logical language... (If not, completely ignore me!) A few small things i noticed:

Third sentence - Finch stopped in his traks That should be "tracks."

Finch put the bags on one of the desks; holding back the impulse of call for Reese I think you want to say "the impulse TO call for Reese."

He sounded asleep with his arms protectively surrounding Leila's small frame He was sound asleep....

The sharp lines on the corner of his mouth and eyes The sharp lines AT the corner

[hotch_fan]

Thanks so much for the amazing feedback and corrections, I really appreciate them :D

I would have read and commented sooner if your post included a word count

Thanks for the tip, while be adding it next time I post a fic. Oh, and I will definitely be writing more, I have plenty of plot bunnies in my head, just need to find the time to sit down and write them :P

[brickhousewench]

I have plenty of plot bunnies in my head, just need to find the time to sit down and write them

I have the same problem. I have two or three ideas that I reallyw ant to work on, but real life is a bit hectic at the moment. =(

I look forward to reading your next fic!

[hotch_fan]

Yeah, it's kind of maddening. There are moment when I had Reese and Finch voices playing the fic in my head or I'm pretty much developing the whole story in my mind. Obsessed pretty much? lol!

Thanks :D

[malone73]

I'm reading this kind of late but this is adorable! Baby Blue was one of my favorite episodes, watching those two take care of a baby made me all gaga.

I realllllllllly need to get back to my fanfiction account, I haven't written in a long time. I have some ideas for Person of Interest but I just can't seem to get the time to write them down

[hotch_fan]

lol! No worries; I wrote this kind of late too :P Glad you like it!

...but I just can't seem to get the time to write them down

Yeah, that seem to be common to most of us PoI fanfic writers. Right now I'm playing with three plot bunnies; one halfway written, the other kind of almost finished and one just started, but the thing is, besides the lack of time, that one don't let me finish the other and the other way around. I'm hoping to get at least one done and posted before the season final :S

[malone73]

Mines mainly written down in my head, it's a kind of long story line so I have the begining, an idea about how it would end, and some ideas for the middle. I might right down a rough draft tonight and write some on my computer this weekend.

[hotch_fan]

Mines mainly written down in my head

lol! That sound kind of familiar ,-)

I'm glad you've got time to write, I'll be hoping for you to post it. Meanwhile, any hints about what is the fic about? *is curious*

[faith_manages03]

Very cute, which you know, and insightful, which you also know. ~.^

[hotch_fan]

*g* Thank you so much!