Fic: In The Mind's Eye by Lildaani

[hermionemods]

Title: In The Mind's Eye
Author/Penname: Lildaani
Artists: kryptiq & curi_o
Pairing/Characters: Hermione/Draco
Summary: For years, she’d had dreams of a mysterious castle and haunting green eyes. When a forgotten friend reenters her life and turns her world on its ear, Hermione finds herself fighting a conspiracy that she knows nothing about. What she does know is

Comments

[curi_o]

Readers, don't let the "it's 'good enough'" fool you. The story is worth reading as it is, and I encourage you to give it a go!

kryptiq, the art is fantabulous. I love the way you divided and aged the paper, and the floral elements just help to tie things together.

lildaani, the story you've created is interesting. It has elements that I've never seen before and creates such an interesting scenario. Nice work. It'll be interesting to see what it's like when you feel done with it.

[lildaani]

Thanks Curi_o. Much affection, respect, and hugs for my artists. You both are awesome!

[sunlitshadow]

I will second that!

While I think I spotted a couple places lildaani was referring to needing some polishing, this is a little gem on its own. It's a premise I don't think I've seen addressed anywhere else in fanfic, and it's something I've thought about... Harry and his sacrificial lamb syndrome, I can really see him considering this whole idea and going through with sending her away. You handled it beautifully, and I loved how naturally you brought the ship into play. It wasn't overdone, you gave a plausible explanation for Draco's change of heart. I also like that the side characters were given actual personalities and roles to play rather than just random stand-ins. All in all, I really enjoyed this.

[lildaani]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked this, and found it believable. I had moments where I doubted 'would Harry really go through with this?' but I went with my first thought (that's what they say to do, right) and forced myself to keep going. Towards the end I was pulling my own hair, thinking about how much more I had wanted to get in there, sub plots and etc, and how I half-assed certain scenes ... but I've always been overly self-critical, too, and I knew that.

The side characters were pretty fun to write, I'm glad you liked them too :)

[eirien84]

I really really liked this story!

It is well written, has an exciting and original plot, believable characterizations up to the minor characters(and it has lots of them!) and wonderful original characters, which is an accomplishment in itself!

One thing I think you should change are the story notes in the first chapter - that almost made me not read it - which would have been a shame! You don´t have to be so modest and draw attention to possible imperfections!

[lildaani]

Thank you :)

You're right about the author's note, it's probably scared a couple readers away. I was frantic and tired when I wrote it, and now I don't want to bother the mods again to change it. Meh. (I really do hate the ending though.)

I'm glad you liked my original characters! Kevin was always so fun to write, lol. I strive for originality in everything I write. If I think it's been used before, I usually don't get very far writing it. (If I do use a "cliche" idea, I try to give it a different spin, as well.)

I'm glad you liked the fic :D

[lucyanferr]

That was an entertaining read. Glad you left it open-ended at the end, with only a promise of romance - you gave your characters the freedom to go on with their lives in whatever way they chose... quite unlike that Rowling twit.

I liked Kevin's attitude, and the general notion that there were Muggleborns other than Hermione dragging Magical Britain out of the 17th century.