Comments | havenward: original writing: Motorcycle Vagabond (3/?)

havenward

original writing: Motorcycle Vagabond (3/?)

Sep 07, 2008 22:24

Title: Motorcycle Vagabond
Rating: G
Words: 226
Note: Continues to be non-linear. PLEASE comment and critique. This one sort of popped in out of nowhere. Working on writing a longer piece that has an actual plot, I swear...

Summary: White Sands is a good place to be alone.

( Its a flat ocean of sand attached to the sky at the edges only by mountains far far in the distance. )

original, writing, motorcycle vagabond

Comments 6

fyrie September 8 2008, 07:07:41 UTC

I do like the fact she keeps time with herself through actions. She's really unfolding as a fascinating sort :)

havenward September 8 2008, 07:14:52 UTC

I do like the fact she keeps time with herself through actions
I'm not quite sure what you mean?

She's really unfolding as a fascinating sort
Thank you :D I'm really enjoying slowly developing her like this!

fyrie September 8 2008, 07:19:44 UTC

Kind of the way she decides to move on when she starts acting a certain way :)

havenward September 8 2008, 07:22:58 UTC

Ooh, yes! Seems a bit obvious looking back on it ::sheepish:: It is kind of an odd way of doing things... I'm probably going to need to start keeping a list of all her weird self-prompts...

teithiwr September 8 2008, 14:27:46 UTC

she likes to burn things Ooh, interesting! ;)

The wide sweeping landscape and her solitude are something that it's going to be really cool for you to elaborate on: there's a lot of potential for metaphor and self-growth reflected in the landscape...

havenward September 8 2008, 14:31:12 UTC

Mmmm, White Sands will be fun to send her back to, most certainly :)