even if there were lots of shalka fics out in the world, this would be the best. as it is, it's still better than everything and i love it and wish that you would pimp it round the communities.
obviously the plot is very exciting and alison uses some wacky words, which i like a lot (though i can't believe the doctor let 'strides' go past, but perhaps he was too hungover), BUT the best bits are still whenever the master says anything at all. particularly the bit about the doorbell. it's a lovely doctor&master relationship and you write it disgustingly well. but in a good way.
as i said above (but now with a different intonation), more?
p.s. the final paragraph break (the one after british shells) just seems to hang there, without being resolved. am i being stupid?
i did indeed to a bit of pimping (except without the hat, i hear you need a hat to be really pimpin') though my journal is not widely read by who fandom at large. still, there it is. i can't think of anywhere else... particularly. there's a general who fiction community, but no shalka community. perhaps i/you should start one, though like all these communities that one discovers do not exist there is probably the reason for it not existing i.e. because there is no real need.
as for the change of location, it's not so much that it needs to be defined, more that making "Good heavens. Do you think those are British shells?" the final line suggests this is an important moment in the scene and what propels us into the next scene, and this isn't the case (except, i suppose, that the doctor's been hiding in the medical... area because of them) and Doctor Shichtman wasn't woken by them - which i felt was strange.
p.s. bickering relationships are always the most fun.
A great chapter as well. I love the Master's lines, you write him perfectly. All of them, really, I can hear their voices in my mind while reading the lines. So the plot thickens, an alien substance in already-nasty-enough mustard gas. And I'm guessing the poor guy in the hospital underwent an alien abduction. Now where did Allison go? Looking forward to the next part =)
Heh, I kept forgetting to read this series (I had it open in a tab, but every time I'd go to it I'd think 'But I need to finish my own story first!' and get sidetracked.)
And I'm glad I did finally stop getting sidetracked, because this is brilliant. I hope the next chapter is going well!
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even if there were lots of shalka fics out in the world, this would be the best. as it is, it's still better than everything and i love it and wish that you would pimp it round the communities.
obviously the plot is very exciting and alison uses some wacky words, which i like a lot (though i can't believe the doctor let 'strides' go past, but perhaps he was too hungover), BUT the best bits are still whenever the master says anything at all. particularly the bit about the doorbell. it's a lovely doctor&master relationship and you write it disgustingly well. but in a good way.
as i said above (but now with a different intonation), more?
p.s. the final paragraph break (the one after british shells) just seems to hang there, without being resolved. am i being stupid?
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as for the change of location, it's not so much that it needs to be defined, more that making "Good heavens. Do you think those are British shells?" the final line suggests this is an important moment in the scene and what propels us into the next scene, and this isn't the case (except, i suppose, that the doctor's been hiding in the medical... area because of them) and Doctor Shichtman wasn't woken by them - which i felt was strange.
p.s. bickering relationships are always the most fun.
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Looking forward to the next part!
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Looking forward to the next part =)
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And I'm glad I did finally stop getting sidetracked, because this is brilliant. I hope the next chapter is going well!
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