I'm always hesitant to get too introspective in the stories I write. There's been more of that in this story than in my others because the pace of the story has been slower -- when it's all fast action there's not much time for the characters to mull over events. And that rule of writing always comes to mind, "Show, don't tell", which usually makes for a more interesting story, and lets the reader use imagination to complete the thoughts of the characters. But I'm glad you enjoyed this little excursion into Jack's head. Thanks, as always, for the feedback -- it's very much appreciated.
Oh, but you do introspective very well, you know ;-) I like this a lot, as I've said, and it's fun to get to know what's going on in Jack's mind here and see that Letty affects him too, in the way he affects her. The conversation between Jack and Tobias is great, as well!
You think so? I'm never sure about it. When I first started reading PotC fanfic I'd find myself thinking about certain authors: "Yeah, enough with the thinking, let's get to the good stuff." There's definitely a fine balance to be struck -- give the audience too little introspection and they sometimes have a hard time relating to the characters. But too much will bore them.
However, after the upcoming Shore Leave in Cartagena chapters there will be more introspection. Those bits will likely be shorter though, like this one.
Tobias is such a fun character. I wish tessabeth would write some more about him and his relationship with young Jack. In the meantime, it's fun to try to fill in a few gaps myself.
Thank you so much for commenting here, too. You're the best.
Thanks so much for the feedback -- I'm glad you found the little excursion into Jack's thoughts interesting. Always working problems from all angles, Jack is.
Ah, yes. Jack's got a new toy, and her name is Letty. I get the idea that he's pleased to have her around--problematic as she is--because she provides entertainment for his lively mind. But he still has that good streak of caring in him too. Interesting peek into his thoughts here.
A Bored Sparrow is a sad (and potentially alarming) thing. But Letty's presence (now that she's not weeping all the time) is entertaining for him on several levels.
More fun on the Pearl. So Letty is getting to the good proto-Captain Jack Sparrow. At least on one level.
in the dreams, she hadn’t been troublesome, precisely Uh oh!
something darker, a rhythm of drums and thumping blood, of controlled force and delicious surrender Things are heating up, I see. And guh!
Oh, he’d take advantage of that, given the least chance! I’m sure he would. Always takes what he can, does our Jack. But this is one place where he can’t give back what he takes, so he’d best be careful.
I think Bill might have been a little overly optimistic that Jack has enough wisdom in this area.
Bill should know, certainly, his idyll with the staid Mary having been the stuff of high drama. Now you really should be forced at cutlass point to write THIS story.
his heart and mind were given to one lady only Yes, the epic love between Jack and his ship--*melt*
she knew what he was But does she really know what that means?
Make sure she understands the rules before you go playin’ that game. The way these pirates play
( ... )
Bill should know, certainly, his idyll with the staid Mary having been the stuff of high drama. Now you really should be forced at cutlass point to write THIS story.
Hmmm... might take a crack at it, eventually. I'm all agog to see what they have Bootstrap Bill doing in the movies. We haven't seen him yet, and know so little about him, really, but what a great character! The fanfiction he's inspired! As far as interesting characters go, I think he's runs second only to Jack.
Loved your Three Bulls story -- yes, that's pirate logic all over.
Glad you liked this. Thanks so much for the comments! Now, on to Cartagena...
Loved your Three Bulls story -- yes, that's pirate logic all over.
That story goes right along with the one customer who had a wife in the United States and one in Canada who didn't know about each other. I met some VERY interesting people in that job!
Wheeeee! Cartagena! (just had to say it one last time)
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You think so? I'm never sure about it. When I first started reading PotC fanfic I'd find myself thinking about certain authors: "Yeah, enough with the thinking, let's get to the good stuff." There's definitely a fine balance to be struck -- give the audience too little introspection and they sometimes have a hard time relating to the characters. But too much will bore them.
However, after the upcoming Shore Leave in Cartagena chapters there will be more introspection. Those bits will likely be shorter though, like this one.
Tobias is such a fun character. I wish tessabeth would write some more about him and his relationship with young Jack. In the meantime, it's fun to try to fill in a few gaps myself.
Thank you so much for commenting here, too. You're the best.
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That's our rationalizing Jack, all right.
Interesting chapter with the evolution of Jack's thinking about his unintended prize.
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Thanks so much for the feedback -- I'm glad you found the little excursion into Jack's thoughts interesting. Always working problems from all angles, Jack is.
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
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in the dreams, she hadn’t been troublesome, precisely
Uh oh!
something darker, a rhythm of drums and thumping blood, of controlled force and delicious surrender
Things are heating up, I see. And guh!
Oh, he’d take advantage of that, given the least chance!
I’m sure he would. Always takes what he can, does our Jack. But this is one place where he can’t give back what he takes, so he’d best be careful.
I think Bill might have been a little overly optimistic that Jack has enough wisdom in this area.
Bill should know, certainly, his idyll with the staid Mary having been the stuff of high drama.
Now you really should be forced at cutlass point to write THIS story.
his heart and mind were given to one lady only
Yes, the epic love between Jack and his ship--*melt*
she knew what he was
But does she really know what that means?
Make sure she understands the rules before you go playin’ that game. The way these pirates play ( ... )
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Bill should know, certainly, his idyll with the staid Mary having been the stuff of high drama.
Now you really should be forced at cutlass point to write THIS story.
Hmmm... might take a crack at it, eventually. I'm all agog to see what they have Bootstrap Bill doing in the movies. We haven't seen him yet, and know so little about him, really, but what a great character! The fanfiction he's inspired! As far as interesting characters go, I think he's runs second only to Jack.
Loved your Three Bulls story -- yes, that's pirate logic all over.
Glad you liked this. Thanks so much for the comments! Now, on to Cartagena...
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That story goes right along with the one customer who had a wife in the United States and one in Canada who didn't know about each other. I met some VERY interesting people in that job!
Wheeeee! Cartagena! (just had to say it one last time)
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