A Blur on the Horizon - Lost - Sawyer/Juliet/Claire

[toestastegood]

Title: A Blur on the Horizon
Pairing: Sawyer/Juliet; Claire/Juliet; Claire/Sawyer
Word Count: 5150
Rating: R
Spoilers: Through S4
A/N: Written for lenina20 for my last varietypack100 "Writer's choice" prompt! She gave me the lyrics "no haven for this heart / no shelter for this child in mazes lost / heaven keep us apart / a curse for every mile of ocean crossed" to

Comments

[navras_rheya]

This was... brilliant! Every single sentence. Amazing.

[dustyirish2003]

This was absolutely amazing. Incredibly amazing.

You've fleshed out the three main characters so very well; they are perfectly in character. And I can't tell you how much I enjoyed Bernard popping up throughout - that made it all just that much better.

Your grasp of language and sentence structure continues to leave me in awe. Wow. And, on top of all that technical stuff, you tell a damn good story ... the most important thing when you boil it all down.

This line absolutely sent a chill up my spine :

They'd thought she was dead. Looking at Claire - her straight back, steady steps, heavy silence - Juliet thinks that they might have been right.

This line gave me warm fuzzies:

She can hear Bernard's soft, peaceful snores.

This one made me laugh with delight :

Sawyer still breathes heavily through his nose like a dog recovering from a fit of barking

And this one simply blew me away:

The warmth flickers away from a second. There is darkness, there is cold, there is a body-wracking shiver before she smiles again. Her hand is on

[jenthegypsy]

"They're coming," she says, changing the topic. "The Oceanic Six, they're coming back. I've tried to stop them, but... They're not the same as they were when they left, guys. They're different. Really different. You need to be prepared."

Claire's cryptic warning is chilling. The idea that the the Oceanic Six are to be feared by those left behind is intriguing. This is screaming sequel - you know it is. Come on, now, you've got 7 months of hiatus stretching before you... What else you gonna do? ;)

[janie_tangerine]

Oh wow, now that was an excellent way to close that table!

The idea was really good and you did a terrific job with it. All three of them are very much IC and I especially like how you portrayed Claire here, she's as cryptic and mysterious as she should be and I like how her dead-but-not-so-dead condition came through. Your Juliet voice is absolutely perfect and I could totally say the same thing for Sawyer. Also, there was some really good humor that sure helped ;)

Claire giggles - giggles - and shakes her head. "It's a little extreme, don't you think? You're sure Sayid isn't still around somewhere?"

This one especially made me completely crack up. And the ending was just perfect, I loved how they sort of came together without them knowing themselves and Bernard showing up everywhere made me a really happy girl ;) congratulations on finishing again and with such a good piece!

[elliotsmelliot]

This was excellent - spooky, tender, erotic and pure crazy! I loved how fragile Claire appeared but then she just disarmed you with her strength and knowledge. Great work! I'm saving this one to my memories.