[Fic] Goal From the Corner

[fate_oblivion]

Rating: K+
Summary: If he were to name the only things he’s tuned to right now, they’re Ada and football. [Ariel/Ada; Set technically months after WS canon, but this is an AU fic because the pair itself is an AU, so.]
Note/s: Written for iu_fanfiction ’s 34th challenge // prompt:: Commonplace. Ahahaha, so. I spectacularly fail (emphasis on the ‘spectacularly’) at

Comments

OH GOD.

[moonsergeant]

AH

AHHH

"Cleaning myself up." AYSOS.

HOW. HOW CAN YOU WRITE LIKE THIS. Every 'action''s amazingly detailed and well-fleshed out.

I really liked this part, too: "[...]before throwing Ada a flat look, something that tells her of that doesn’t count and I wasn’t concentrating." I think it's a pretty nice description that makes me picture the look on his face. :>

AND WHAT MESSING UP ADA THERE WAS NO MESSING UP HERE. Football. Oh my. Sexy sport. GUDJAB MILES ;U; OH GOD.

Re: OH GOD.

[moonsergeant]

The flow was smooth, and the pacing felt like there was really action going on--but at the same time it didn't sound robotic. ;u;

[inkstainedblade]

You're writing style really blows me away. *O* And the characterization is flawless. There's nothing more to say, really.

Wonderful fic. :D It's just oozing with greatness. :))