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essenceofmeanin

Fic: All Ripe For Dreamin', Gen

Mar 22, 2008 11:03

Title: All Ripe For Dreamin’
Author: essenceofmeanin
Rating/Characters/WC: R for language, Sam & Dean (gen), 1,100
A/N: This story is for minkmix, Dean POV during Sam's nightmares in s1. Sam has bad dreams -- Dean doses him with sleeping pills, and frets.
Beta'd by girlguidejones and hansbekhart.
Disclaimer: The boys belong to the CW.

( “So, this one time, Dad and I were driving along blasting Zeppelin IV. And outta nowhere during Fool in the Rain he turns to me and he says, ‘Dean, that’s the only acceptable use of a steel drum I’ve ever heard.’” )

gen, fic

Comments 68

rei_c March 22 2008, 23:04:03 UTC

Oh, man. This is lovely -- such a killer hook (I think I'd have to agree with John on the steel drum) and it goes on so beautifully. That image of Dean being awake while Sam's sleeping, and cleaning, sharpening knives, the manager watching across the lot, it's so perfect.

♥

essenceofmeanin March 23 2008, 01:50:16 UTC

hee, thank you! it seemed very *john*, y'know? i'm glad you liked this, rei. :D:D

iamstealthyone March 22 2008, 23:37:02 UTC

Very nicely done. I love the structure, how you go back and forth between the current narrative and the snippets of what Dean says to Sam when he’s up while Sam sleeps. And I like the idea of Dean giving Sam sleeping pills. I can totally see him trying that to help Sam sleep better. *pets Dean*

Favorite lines:

He figures it’s probably a byproduct of a childhood spent as Dad’s baby monitor, but it’s true.

Great description. I’m sure John relied heavily on Dean during those early years without even realizing it.

Dean’s not sleeping much; the noises that come out of Sam make his stomach hurt,

Oh, boys.

His face gets all screwed up like when he was a kid and Dad was trying to feed him something he didn’t like.

Great analogy. Also: Poor Sam!

It makes Dean itch; it makes him want to kill something.

Yeah, having Sam hurting so much will never be easy for Dean to witness, especially when he feels he can’t do very much about it.

He doesn’t remember crawling into Sammy’s crib every night for weeks after the fire, but he’s got Dad’s ( ... )

essenceofmeanin March 23 2008, 01:51:29 UTC

wow, thank you! that's a lot of favorite lines -- some of my own, too. :D this fic pretty much just poured itself out. nice insights. :D

iamstealthyone March 23 2008, 19:00:53 UTC

this fic pretty much just poured itself out.

It's a great feeling when fics do that, isn't it? :)

essenceofmeanin March 28 2008, 22:52:45 UTC

it really is -- some fics i've had to fight tooth and nail to get out.

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littlestarling March 22 2008, 23:59:32 UTC

Interesting stream of consciousness and flow. It's cool getting inside Dean's head and his memories like that.

Only thing is, this fic made me really sleepy.

essenceofmeanin March 23 2008, 01:52:56 UTC

heh. *hands you a sleeping pill* your icon is so very cute! thanks for the comment, shea!

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essenceofmeanin March 23 2008, 01:53:15 UTC

yay! i'm glad you enjoyed.

girlguidejones March 23 2008, 02:41:46 UTC

::applauds::

The teeny changes are perfect. Yaye! Go you!

essenceofmeanin March 23 2008, 09:16:03 UTC

we rock!