One For The Ages -- Version II

[emo_snal]

          It's time to submit a second story for my creative writing class.  I decided to use the opportunity to polish up this story I wrote three years ago. Story is due tomorrow (Sunday) morning at 9am, so hopefully someone will have time to look at it and give me feedback before then!

972 AD, Jorvik, England -Olaf mutters some curses as he

Comments

[technophobe1975]

I think I remember this story from the first time around - it is the kind of tale that sticks in the memory!
I like it a lot - a quirky slice of life, history and epic bowel movements :)

[emo_snal]

thanks! Yeah I'd been mulling over, since the beginning of the class in January really, which of my stories to revise and submit for hte second one, finally settling on this one. At its heart its really just a giant poop joke that hinges on a pun, but it warms my little heart. ;D

[blergeatkitty]

I love the Viking Museum in York!

[emo_snal]

I'd love to visit it some day! And when I do, and I behold this epic crap for the first time, it will be a special moment ;D

[basric]

A really good story.

[emo_snal]

Thanks! (:

[alycewilson]

I think I remember this one! From Season 8, right? I don't know if it's too late to help you out, so I'll make my comments brief.

As descriptive as the first section was, it also takes us away from the true point of the story, which is obviously a humorous look at the actual nature of history (far different than we imagine it). My one suggestion would be to start with Olaf entering the bar and then turn your descriptive eye on the bar itself and the denizens therein, highlighting the details that emphasize the squalor and humor.

Good luck on the class!

[swirlsofblue]

Love this, loved Olaf's thoughts, very funny :)