We're not calling it Babe 13/?

[emebalia]

Chapter 13

For a small town fair this one was huge. The closer to the fairground they got, the thicker the crowd became. By the time they reached the first attractions in the outskirts of the whole thing they could barely move. It was a pushing and a shoving and Dean was just glad that Sam had turned out so big. If Sam had stopped growing at a

Comments

[phyllis2779]

I like the way this story is moving along. Still a mystery but we get clues along the way. You write in a way that I get a strong picture of what's happening, for example, Dean toting the Teddy. Well done.

[emebalia]

Thank you, I'm happy you like it.

[fanspired]

I got it at: "With a frown he plucked something out of the torn fabric. A small branch?" and cheered when I read the last line! :)) I'm still suspicious of the whiskey flavoured candy, though :P Seriously, the way you built up to that reveal was brilliant. You're one hell of a story teller. I love how you always end on a hook, and I'm in awe of the way you produce a chapter, regular as clockwork, every week. I wish I had that kind of discipline.

I loved this description: he just followed the floppy mop of hair that bobbed over all the others like a buoy on the ocean.

And I loved Sam pacifying Dean with ice cream :)))

[emebalia]

You're good. You have no idea how many people are still confused.

I hate waiting for the next chapter and sometimes when it comes up I've no idea what the story was about because it has been so long. I try to spare my readers that frustration ;)

Thank you.

[anonymous]

I was thinking about a hex bag because of the number of teddy bears and the donor was a woman. And of course the cotton candy also, whiskey favor? Haha how convenient.

This is intense and with some hints of the brothers' past and relationship which melt my heart.

And Mac is so adorable!❤ I'm checking LJ for your update every week. Brilliant work!

[emebalia]

Hex bags are overdone ;)
Thank you.

[alaine1910]

Great update - still really enjoying this one

[emebalia]

Thank you.