Comments | ds_flashfiction: "Stripped"-- by sprat

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"Stripped"-- by sprat

Dec 01, 2004 22:18

Naked without sex...plus a little sex. :)

Ray/Ray, NC-17, 2244 words.

ETA: eek! almost forgot to thank the incredible qe2 for her keen-eyed beta... Thank-you!

( Stripped )

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sprat December 2 2004, 21:34:20 UTC

Eep--not so much the story to be read in one's parents' kitchen. A wise decision, I think.

Hope you enjoy! :)

jade_starlight December 2 2004, 09:16:54 UTC

Um, wow. I'd say more about how freakin' hot this was, but I haven't recovered all my verbal skills yet. *fans self*

sprat December 2 2004, 21:37:01 UTC

:) That's plenty! Thanks so much for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed!

...whew. qe2 December 2 2004, 09:44:00 UTC

Damn, darlin': I betaed this smokin' thang and I'm STILL overcome by teh hot and sexxay, especially in combination with a smattering of plot and a healthy dose of snarky, sweat affection. It rocks. So do you. That is all.

Re: ...whew. sprat December 2 2004, 21:46:24 UTC

Aww...but that's not all! Because *you* rock--this story would be kind of a mess without your clarifying questions and your insistance that everybody's limbs be accounted for. But I am glad you enjoyed the reading, and it's *great* to hear it again.

:)

akite December 2 2004, 10:20:43 UTC

Oh man! That had it all going: the naked, the coat, the HOT sex and most importantly, the snark. Whew! Wonderful, wonderful stuff.

sprat December 2 2004, 21:48:49 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm very happy you liked this--and I really appreciate your comment. :)

brooklinegirl December 2 2004, 10:21:55 UTC

Um. This is gonna be in two parts 'cause it got too long. *g*

Oh my god, lady. I'm in love with you. Seriously. This is just - dear god. I think I'm broken. I mean, okay, so, I read it and was determined to give more feedback than "nrrrgh" because I fucking loved this. So I was thinking about it on the way to work (in which "thinking" means "having dirty fantasies") and man, I have to tell you, so much of this just stuck with me in, like, vast and meaningful detail. I think that's what I love so much about your writing - that it's the moments and the meaning and the details that go way beyond the sex - though I am not in ANY WAY knocking the sex, because I love the sex, I adore the sex, I worship the sex - but within the fucking, and around it, there are all these moments that just, just rock my world. Like:

Ray, watching, can’t help thinking how these neo-Nazis always manage to get naked and touching, like that’s the real goal of their weird little rituals. He grins down at his bare toes.Okay. Yeah. All the rest of this fic, and ( ... )