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[one-shot] that infernal ticking

May 06, 2013 07:36

Title: That Infernal Ticking
Author: b_sim
Characters/Pairings: Hideto (OC)
Rating: PG
Genre: General
Summary: Life moved fast and the people moved even faster.
Notes: Hideto and his funny little relationship with time.
Disclaimer: Hideto belongs to me.

( Tick-tock, tick-tock )

genre: general, one-shot, char: hideto, rating: pg

Comments 2

schwarzfluegel May 6 2013, 09:29:37 UTC

Really interesting thoughts on today's everyday life. I'd like to know what inspired you to write this one :3
And I almost laughed my ass off when I read hideto being crushed by cyclists for exactly 351 times x3

Though there's one thing in your recent fics that bothers me a litte: You tend to use the names a lot to begin the sentences. Maybe it's just me, bc I'm the complete opposite - I rather use pronouns instead of names - but like this imho reading isn't that 'fluent' anymore ._.

b_sim May 6 2013, 09:55:36 UTC

Honestly? This. I've been browsing through WriteWorld's image blocks to get some inspiration so I guess you could say it worked. :P

Haha, I didn't even notice. I'll be more aware of it next time. ♥