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Drabble: Ebony and Phoenix

Oct 01, 2010 22:06

Title: Ebony and Phoenix
Author: dexstarr
Word Count: 300
Rating: G
Challenge: deathly_contest Week #4: Life of a Wand
Characters: Narcissa Black, Ollivander
Warnings: None
Author's Note: I may rewrite this at one point, as I had a lot of ideas that I couldn't fit into the 300 word limit length. Because I cut so much it may be a bit disjointed. Lastly, I was highly ( Read more... )

community: deathly_contest, length: drabble (100-500), year: 2010, rating: g, type: gen, fic, character: ollivander, character: narcissa (black) malfoy

Comments 8

reg_flint October 2 2010, 02:50:40 UTC

Ah, yes, you deserved your shiny. I knew that before I'd gone six lines. Ollivander + Narcissa = win. And excellent writing.

scarysnapey October 2 2010, 03:03:09 UTC

I concur!

dexstarr October 2 2010, 10:30:21 UTC

Aw thanks!

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dexstarr October 2 2010, 10:29:15 UTC

Thanks babe!

diabolica October 3 2010, 09:23:02 UTC

Congrats on your well-deserved win! This is a fascinating little snippet of life for both Narcissa and Ollivander. The tape measure, in particular, was a crafty detail.

I would second the idea of a re-write, only so I can get more of this! (Selfish me. *g*) I think there's a lot happening here that bears further exploration, not least the relationship Ollivander and Narcissa will one day have when he's a prisoner in her home. The bunnies are endless. Great work.

dexstarr October 3 2010, 23:47:25 UTC

Thank you!

I think I had about twelve hundred discarded words/false starts for this three hundred word drabble, so I have a lot of material to go back and use when I re-write.

I hadn't considered the future relationship between Ollivander and Narcissa...hmmm. That will require some thinking about *makes note*

diabolica October 4 2010, 16:07:50 UTC

Discarded words and false starts ... I hear you. *nodnod* Drabbling is far more difficult than it looks.

As for Ollivander and Narcissa, I gave it exactly ... one moment's thought when I was writing Scylla, Charybdis but I ultimately decided the focus of the story was elsewhere and so didn't include more than two lines about him. Then I beta'ed a truly amazing Ollivander fic in which the author touched on Ollivander's thoughts about the Malfoy family--but again, the focus of that story was elsewhere. But when I think about it, Ollivander disappeared at the beginning of HBP, and we don't find out for sure where he is until well into DH. Assuming he was brought to Malfoy manor right after he was kidnapped, which was at a time when Lucius was in prison, he would have been at the house well over a year, and for the first several months at least, Narcissa (and possibly Bellatrix) would have been the only other person permanently living there. So they may very well have interacted. This drabble makes me wonder what they might have said to ( ... )

dexstarr October 5 2010, 02:49:25 UTC

Wow. I just finished reading the fic you linked - it's amazing. Thanks for linking.

I didn't think about Ollivander being a prisoner in Malfoy Manor at all when I wrote this drabble, and now that you mention it, I can't believe how I overlooked it.

The more I think about this, it would be interesting, maybe, to do a bit for each time Narcissa encountered Ollivander. Especially when they went to buy Draco's wand; in the first book, Draco tells Harry his mother is up the street looking at wands. Then of course when Ollivander is a prisoner at Malfoy Manor...that would be intriguing to figure out if, and how, they interacted.

This definitely will require further thought....