[FanFic] The Seer's Diary: The Truce (4/?)

[crystallicrain]

Title: The Seer's Diary: The Truce (4/?)
Status: WIP
Word Count: 3090
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Adventure/Romance
Characters/Pairings: Lily/James, Sirius Black, Remus Lupin, Peter Pettigrew, Severus Snape, Dorcas Meadowes, Alice/Frank, Petunia Evans, and many others
Summary: 1977-Suddenly Lily Evans's world is turned upside-down when she comes across

Comments

[ichthyes]

Hey there. :) I just finished reading all of the previous chapters and this one. I really like it so far, it's a cute progression of James and Lily's relationship. I'm excited to read more!

You're doing a good job of keeping the war relevant and bringing characters like Dorcas into it; and I liked that you inserted an extra interaction with Severus- I think that will drive Lily in a lot of ways. Overall, very nice take on this. The only thing I'd say is, I thirst for more action! But I assume you have some planned for the future. ;)

[crystallicrain]

Thank you very much! I'm definitely not an adventure writer. Most of what I write is fluffy or angsty, but I decided to write this as a sort of exercise in something with more plot and action. So thank you very much! I am planning some action scenes coming up, I'm just hoping they're not too.. rushed? xD

[ichthyes]

I don't think it will feel rushed at all. :) I look forward to reading it!