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Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) beer_good_foamy February 21 2017, 20:35:50 UTC
I've never written PoI before, but this prompt wouldn't leave me alone. Hope this works.

Junk Code

Root doesn't remember feelings. Sometimes she wonders if other people do, or if it's normal. (If Sam Groves did, before something broke in her.) Not that she's sociopath or anything, though cogito ergo sum etc so who's to say, really. She has feelings, she can remember having them just fine, but once the raw shock of pain or anger or horniness or glee or grief dulls, all that remains is an echo and pointless similes that say nothing about the thing itself. She can be happy, like all those times Sam and Hanna hung out in the library and Hanna would talk to her and stand up for her and make her read books and tell her secrets and Sam would be giddy every time they met and there was something good about this sinking town where people clung to whatever they could float on (yes, Hanna made her read Dandelion Wine and she loved it) … She should have access to that, but it's as if it's all junk code that people can only access when they crash ( ... )

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RE: Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) talkingtothesky February 21 2017, 20:58:40 UTC
how the GSW scar in her shoulder (her GSW) itches in anticipation
Guhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Yes, yes, yes.

And that final sentence! My heart. Thank you for writing this.

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RE: Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) beer_good_foamy February 22 2017, 07:47:47 UTC
Thank you, glad you liked it!

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RE: Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) clockwork_hart1 February 21 2017, 21:57:28 UTC
this is brutal, filthy-good. you get so beautifully visceral to explore her mindset and it's perfect

I'm going to quote this whole paragraph at you because I loved it:

Of course Root is happy, like when a plan comes together, and... honestly, sometimes killing people who thought they had it all figured out can be pretty fucking funny. That smile is genuine, even if it's mostly for herself. But there's always that second when someone realises you've played them and/or that you're the last person they're ever going to see in this life, and it seems so intense. You freeze them in that moment of perfect ecstasy forever. Sometimes she envies them, wonders if she'll see it coming when it inevitably does, if she'll have time to feel it. But mostly she keeps her eyes on the prize, staying two steps ahead of everyone else and getting rid of anyone who gets in the way. She knows it's not normal, so it must be better.

How gorgeously terrible is this?

anyway, this was a comment.

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RE: Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) beer_good_foamy February 22 2017, 07:55:11 UTC
Thanks a lot!

Root really isn't a nice person, but there's so much there to dig into.

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RE: Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) lynzie914 March 5 2017, 03:36:13 UTC
late reply is late. I'm sorry, I was sick.

But I loved this!

I love how you wrote Root, her exploration of her own feelings and confusion over them. Her believing you can't depend on anyone (indluding her). Uh, that's just so perfectly Root. People are flawed and broken. But a machine, a machine that is god it can be depended on and it makes her into something new. She's still flawed and broken because she still feels and the feelings disappear and Shaw is always there. "a bug in the system'. I love that. There's aren't supposed to be flaws, but its Sameen and makes everything different somehow. Just like Hanna made everything different all those years ago before Root fully existed, before.

And the last lines. So perfect. So Root.

You did such an amazing job on this. I loved it.

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RE: Fill: Junk Code (PoI, Root/Shaw) beer_good_foamy March 5 2017, 11:49:37 UTC
Thanks a lot (and I hope you're feeling better!) So glad you liked it.

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