LJ Idol: Week Sixteen - Open Topic

[ckocher]

The wind swirled through the open door, biting against the warmth of the diner. Those closest to the door shivered and glared at the old man as he stood at the threshold for a long moment. He stepped through, just enough so that door swung shut behind him, the bell jangling against the glass.

Steam from endless cups of coffee and bowls of hot soup

Comments

[yachiru]

I liked this for an opening to a longer story. The way you personify the gods is interesting to me.

[myrna_bird]

Glad you got a chance to write this. very interesting. I love the imagery through-out but especially the second paragraph.

[amenquohi]

Lovely use of words to paint a scene - I want more!

[lilycobalt]

I love a good mythological story, and this was definitely a good one! I want to know what happens next.

[basric]

Well I liked it very much. How about friending so I don't miss it in case you write on it outside idol?