VM Fic: No Longer That Girl, Part 2/2 (Lilly, Piz, Veronica/Logan, Wallace, Mac) R

[celtic_flicka]

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Comments

[onceuponapillow]

I honestly wasn't sure how this was gonna play but I loved it. You wrote their relationship so well. I loved how it slowly built and how Piz stopped it from going to the next level.

I really felt for Lilly. She went through hell and felt like she had to hide to protect her friends.

Her conversations with Piz were great. I loved that she let him see who she was. And I really loved the mention of her father supporting her.

[celtic_flicka]

I must admit I was very tempting to write a much smuttier ending, but it really didn't work with my premise of the changes in Lilly.

I'm glad you liked the bits about Jake. I think Jake was a caring dad, but perhaps just not around enough because of his job. His breakdown at her memorial gets me every time, and I assumed he had a lot of guilt about what happened to Lilly. So here, Jake has a second chance with his daughter!

Thanks for commenting!

[afrocurl]

I expected so much more from Lilly here than I got, but I like that. The grown up version of her is still fun, but actually responsible.

Of course, I also think Piz is still slightly stupid here, but less than I did on the show. Good job there.

[celtic_flicka]

Thanks! I figured that if I was working with the idea that she survived the attack, I had to make her a little different as a result. Attempted murder will do that to a girl. :)

Yeah, Piz is still kind of a doof, but since his character history is still basically the same, I couldn't change him *too* much!

Thanks for reading.

[myblognstuff]

Haven't read it yet, but I'm gonna pretend this is a bday gift for me lol. Yay! I love everything you write, so I know it'll be good. Ok and now I read.... :)

[celtic_flicka]

Thanks! :)

[darlingsaila]

I was very intrigued by the idea of Lilly/Piz while being very leery of it, too. If that makes sense. But I thought you did a wonderful job with this because you totally made the relationship believable to me. The build up of it was great.

Plus, I like the grown up version of Lilly Kane. She has her "Lilly" moments, but overall, she knows what's important and you could tell what she went through changed her. Rightfully so. You also made Piz slightly more likeable, too. Tough feat ;)

♥

[celtic_flicka]

I was very intrigued by the idea of Lilly/Piz while being very leery of it, too.

From what I'm reading here, you weren't the only one! I was a little leery about writing it, to tell the truth, but I really wanted to try something less Veronica and/or Logan-centric.

Thanks so much for your comments!

[tsfsydpipjordan]

I really enjoyed reading this story. The idea of Lilly and Piz intrigued me. I would love to read more stories set in this universe. Great Job!

[celtic_flicka]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.