Comments | ayumi_nb: Harry Potter Drabble: "The Final Battle"

ayumi_nb

Harry Potter Drabble: "The Final Battle"

Jun 08, 2010 23:09

Okay, I've been reading a lot of H/Hr fic lately, all of them pumped high in angst, so I wanted to make something like hearted, and fluffy.

I hope you enjoy it. I went back to stealing prompts from dead comms.

Title: "The Final Battle"
Beta: Need one...
Rating: PG
Words: 200 (100 each)
Characters: Harry, (Hermione), (extra chara, maybe?)
Pairings ( Read more... )

character: hermione j. granger, ff: harry potter - ootp, ff: harry potter - au, ship: harry/hermione, ff: aus, fandom: harry potter, character: harry j. potter, themed comms: harry100, ff: drabbles, rating: pg

Comments 14

madderbrad June 10 2010, 01:59:06 UTC

Oh, this is nice!

One nitpick error:

As soon as he’s standing, he snowballs attack him.

It should be 'she snowballs', right?

I'd also suggest that the phrase 'snowballs attack him' isn't grammatically correct. Maybe just 'she snowballs him'? Or 'she hits him with another snowball'?

ayumi_nb June 10 2010, 02:04:23 UTC

it's supposed to say "the snowballs..." fixed it though

thanks for commenting btw

filkertom June 10 2010, 02:01:45 UTC

Actually, I think it might be "the snowballs attack him". Very cute!

ayumi_nb June 10 2010, 02:04:46 UTC

that it is, thanks for commenting!

wolfraven80 June 10 2010, 02:27:10 UTC

Awwww. The ending was adorable! Very nice!

ayumi_nb June 10 2010, 19:48:18 UTC

thanks

heliconian_julz June 10 2010, 06:19:30 UTC

Very cute! I'll be recommending this to some other Harmony shippers XD

ayumi_nb June 10 2010, 19:48:37 UTC

please do!

karahalliwell June 10 2010, 14:54:22 UTC

Sad and sweet in one post? OMG, its kindda epic <3

ayumi_nb June 10 2010, 19:49:28 UTC

thank you