The History Books Forgot About Us

[artemisrampant]

 A quick vignette in honor of Mercutio and Benvolio.  It's a re-imagining of the scene where they are looking for Romeo, but he's gone off to the balcony scene.  It goes on a little longer, and is much slashier of course.  Also, you'll have to assume that they saw him kissing Juliet at the party, because it's the only way their lack of surprise

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[pargoletta]

What a sweet little vignette! Thank you for posting it; I'm very glad to have had the opportunity to read it. I particularly liked the conversation starting from "I have yet to hear an historian recount awkward fumbles made between friends in the black of night." It sings with the tension of mutual discovery and admission, and you can just feel things clicking into place for these two secretive boys.

[artemisrampant]

Aw, thank you! It's one of those things that just wrote itself, and I didn't quite know where it was going until it was finished. I'm rather pleased the way it turned out, though, especially the Shakespearean language, which I've only attempted a couple times before. Anyways, I'm so glad you liked it!

[pargoletta]

Sometimes you really do get the best stories by just sitting down and writing and seeing where that takes you.

In general, I thought the language worked well. It's just enough to give the story a distinct Shakespearean flavor, but not enough to overwhelm it and send one running for the modernist hills.

[shinobi_mi_chan]

Oooh, that was lovely, you pulled off the Shakespearean language quite well, methinks. Nice work! It was so sweet, and playd directly into the original plot.

[skepticeddie]

Now I believe in Mercutio/Benvolio. I didn't see it before, but it makes sense now. :P

[artemisrampant]

Now THAT is a compliment. :D I'm glad I could turn you over to the dark side!

[skepticeddie]

Cookies sure are good over here.