Comments | arcadiasilver: I FINISHED IT!

arcadiasilver

I FINISHED IT!

Jun 01, 2009 16:48

So, I finally stopped being a lazy ass and finished this seven page one-shot for the Giveaway at the IchiRuki FC at Bleach Asylum.

Not beta'd, not really polished and is probably full of fail and typos. Still, read on good people!

Title: Crucible
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Ichigo and Rukia
Genre: Hurt/Comfort/Angst/Fluff
Warning: Terrible OOCness, sugary ( Read more... )

ichiruki, ichigo, fanfiction, angst, rukia, hurt/comfort, fluff

Comments 13

animefantasyfan June 1 2009, 22:07:46 UTC

Oh my god AWESOME!!!

This is so great- thank you for skipping that confession. That single-handedly turned this into a freakin' masterpiece.

*has memed*

I think that considering how this story is shonen, this is VERY close to how their relationship will turn out, with some quiet and touching moment between the two of them in the last chapter, that tells us there's a future, but doesn't delve into the details.

Of course I would love to see definitive scenes, such as an epilogue with the two of them married or kissing or something, but that's probably not going to happen. T.T

Beautiful job again!! :D

arcadiasilver June 1 2009, 22:27:33 UTC

Thank you, I'm flattered that you mem'd it!

I felt that skipping the confession was a good idea, that doing it while Ichigo was so vulnerable would cheapen it in some way.

wdboldstar June 1 2009, 22:20:54 UTC

Thank you so much for sharing this. It's such a brutal look at Ichigo's inner feelings, and such a wonderful example of how Rukia has always been the right combination of rough and tender to calm Ichigo, and how she can, in fact, turn from an awesome inspiring warrior woman to a gentle lover without it seeming forced.

Again, thank you so much for sharing this. I really enjoyed it.

arcadiasilver June 1 2009, 22:26:32 UTC

Thank you for the comment! I really tried to get into Ichigo's head and Rukia's with this, and tried to be fair with examining their common flaws here.

wintaerland June 2 2009, 02:33:28 UTC

This was really well written and well thought out. Not having him confess yet was great. I also love how this fic made me love his hollow, lol. The humor and seriousness were very well balanced and that one line about braiding his hair just about made me chuckle my head off.

One slight comment though, you called his Ichigo Kurosaki in the last big paragraph, but called him Kurosaki Ichigo in the other places

arcadiasilver June 2 2009, 02:36:52 UTC

Ooh, thanks for the heads up on the inconsistency!

I really tried to throw a bit of everything in here, even some crack fan theory. I'm very glad you enjoyed it!

Oo Made you love his hollow? How so?

wintaerland June 4 2009, 16:38:00 UTC

Sorry for the late reply, LJ wouldn't let me respond earlier...

No problems on the heads up, that's what the readers are here for right?

And I guess I loved his hollow cuz it was able to make Ichigo kill his mom's illusion and thereby snap him out of it and essentially save them all from Aizen

Or I just like characters who slap some sense into the silly hallucinating/emo-ing characters

SIMPLY AMAZING!!! anonymous June 2 2009, 02:36:33 UTC

WOW!!! The storyline, everything! It all simply flowed! I'm glad you took you time on this; I don't know if I would've gotten the full, blown away, effect if you didn't. But now the problem is I can't wait for more! A job well done!

Re: SIMPLY AMAZING!!! arcadiasilver June 2 2009, 02:48:45 UTC

Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed it enough to leave a comment here!

nooziewoozie June 4 2009, 06:02:41 UTC

Thank you for posting this! I usually avoid IchiRuki fics because hardly any of them capture how truly balanced and nuanced their relationship is, but, by Aizen (who would totally try to mind-rape Ichigo that way, wouldn't he?), I think you've got it. They're so in character, I kinda wanna cry ^^;

I found the irony that Ichigo's hollow saved him by intervening both horrifying and terribly realistic: the hollow represents everything ruthless about Ichigo, and it would definitely intervene if Ichigo's mushy human emotions were leading him to defeat. And the description of Ichigo's reiatsu, instead of billowing out in waves, was just kind of slinking around like smoke was wonderful, and very telling of his emotional state. Your description of it was very well worded.

I also really loved how you made Rukia realize and confess, but it was done so...realistically, for lack of a better word. Ichigo and Rukia aren't about grand declarations and grandiose gestures; they're all about subtleties and implicit understanding. I love how you ( ... )

arcadiasilver June 4 2009, 08:02:53 UTC

Thank you so much for the advice on the tenses - its by far my biggest weakness in writing.

Otherwise, thank you very much for the compliments - I tried very hard to make this fic something to be proud of and I'm glad that I was able to that in your eyes. Seriously, I'm extremely flattered by your praise.