Comments | animorphsfanfic: Alloran, Esplin, &c.

teremala in animorphsfanfic

Alloran, Esplin, &c.

Sep 20, 2005 11:37

Hi, there. I'm not officially much of a writer - aside from the obligatory annual attempt at outlasting Nanowrimo - much less a writer of fanfiction, but I now mysteriously have a creative writing class and find myself tapping out Animorphs tales instead of writing on the assigned topics. This is the beginning of a story that’s a take on several ( Read more... )

elfangor, alloran, ax, visser three

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emilyanna07 September 20 2005, 17:04:05 UTC

Oooh very nice! Is there more?

teremala September 20 2005, 17:27:21 UTC

Thanks! It's a WIP at the moment, but more is tentatively outlined and should be forthcoming. I'm glad you liked it. :)

karma_fucked September 21 2005, 00:02:14 UTC

Amazing. I really enjoyed that. Please write more.

The ending was perfect.

teremala September 21 2005, 02:34:03 UTC

*basks in the warm glow that is positive responses*

Thank you! I was pleasantly surprised by the turn in the story that lead to that ending - I still plan to focus a lot on Alloran's past, as you probably guessed from my other post, but it was really nice to be able to say something about her from an outside perspective.

nyonyo September 21 2005, 02:37:51 UTC

I understood, I thought; winning the war does not erase the past.

Oh my God, this is awesome. The ending? Perfect. It's beautifully written, and...yeah. Amazing, and I can't wait to see more of this. Great, great job.

teremala September 21 2005, 03:56:57 UTC

Thank you! I'm so happy that you like it; there's a lot going on, plot-wise, in this one section, so I was kind of worried it wasn't making a lot of sense. I absolutely loved writing from Alloran's POV, though, despite his failings as a coherent source of knowledge, and I think I'm going to try to keep the whole story in his perspective, if I can.

nothlithawk777 September 22 2005, 03:06:36 UTC

"...but most often their eyes focused on the one who was not there: the brave female with the yellow hair."

I just love this part. I really liked how so much of the scene indirectly focused on Rachel...but not really. Very well done. Perfect.

teremala September 22 2005, 04:17:42 UTC

Thanks! :) It's kind of funny, to me, that so many people - well, three, anyway ;) - liked the bits about Rachel; I didn't really mean for this to be about her, as you probably noticed. *shrugs* I do think that it worked out nicely, since I got to say something about her (and another, rather under-appreciated Yellow Haired Female) from a new perspective, but it was really just the result of cynical musings about Visser Three not THWAP!ing at least a few of them while he had the chance.

distiviant November 26 2005, 15:00:13 UTC

This is a beautiful story. I like ... well, everything. If you write more, I will love to read it. I never really thought of how Alloran would feel after being free, strangely enough, and it was cool to see all this from his point of view.
I wonder if the War-Prince ever found out about Tobias's parentage.

teremala November 26 2005, 17:43:40 UTC

Thank you! Officially, there is more, but I'm not sure that I like it, yet. ;)

I don't know what KA intended, but I do plan to have Alloran find out about Tobias, and Ax about Elfangor. It seemed to me that a lot was left unsaid and/or unexplained in #54, and that the Andalite-types were particularly neglected.