Comments | ana_grrl: Stargate fic: Teal'c/Cameron (NC-17): Men of Action

ana_grrl

Stargate fic: Teal'c/Cameron (NC-17): Men of Action

Dec 04, 2005 10:33

Yesterday I posted a couple of snippets from an AU Cameron Mitchell: Bounty Hunter. I started thinking about backstory. How they met. This is the result, and wow. I actually kind of like it! Comments/crit most welcome.

Men of Action
Teal'c/Cameron AU
NC-17
Words: 2120
Summary: Invasion. Rebellion. Jaffa traitor. Air Force guy.

( Why're you doing this? )

the fun stuff, au, sg1 fic, bounty hunter au, teal'c/cameron

Comments 34

rydra_wong December 4 2005, 16:56:58 UTC

*is now dead from love and envy of your writing prowess*

ana_grrl December 4 2005, 17:18:25 UTC

I am very, very happy now. Thank you :DD

rydra_wong December 5 2005, 20:09:46 UTC

Have now picked myself up off the floor enough to attempt coherent feedback, because this is really excellent.

The prose is so pared down and effective, and you've got this whole big plotty apocalyptic AU thing all there in the background, but without any more detail than you need, and the characters are so much themselves while being plausibly shaped by their AU lives, and their wary connections are perfect, and the sex is credible and also very hot, and the whole thing is just - damn.

OK, not so much with the coherent, then.

ana_grrl December 5 2005, 20:55:47 UTC

Hi! Thanks for the detailed comments *blush* I know I've said it before, but breaking into a new fandom is so different - especially given how comfy I am in Firefly fandom. These kinds of comments really, really make my day and encourage me to keep going. Especially with AU stuff, which is always a bit of a stretch.

I'm very pleased that the limited details about the plot didn't annoy you. I wanted everything to be rather spare, the barebones feel, atmospherically. I felt like too much detail would weigh the whole thing down; but at the same time I wondered if that would be a mistake. So knowing the balance worked is really helpful. Also - yayay! that the sex was hot *g*

You totally were coherent.

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tealc_junky December 4 2005, 20:46:45 UTC

Yes! More! More is good! You're speedy too, which is even better. :)

Do hope you're gonna keep on with this. Love the tone, characterization, pretty much everything. Oh, and you might want to post these over at tealc_fic as well. I'm sure there are folks there who'd love to see it. Thanks for sharing and I can't wait for more!

ana_grrl December 4 2005, 21:07:43 UTC

You're speedy too, which is even better

I was writing it when you last emailed! - but since it was a prequel, that's why I said I was sort of working on more along those lines.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this. I'm so happy that the tone and characterisation jived for you. I am rather nervous about this story, mostly because I wonder how good an idea it is to get sucked into AU when I'm still new to a fandom. But the thing is, I'm really interested in this specific idea, and so it's especially great to get encouragement!

tealc_junky December 4 2005, 21:29:52 UTC

Hey, AU can be a good and entertaining thing...and it can also let you play with characters you might be too intimidated to try and deal with in canon if you're not 100% familiar with their backgrounds. (God knows I got hit with this problem...I'm just starting S8 on dvd and haven't finished anything yet b/c my view of the characters keeps getting tweaked. Should have just said to hell with it and started writing back in S2 or 3, but I didn't want to screw things up...silly me. ><)

Besides, it's a really entertaining idea and it's always best to write things that interest you the most anyway.

ana_grrl December 4 2005, 23:04:07 UTC

I've always enjoyed reading AU fics (if they're well done). They can be so fun and I'm a big fan of the whole 'what if' thing. Especially if that 'what if' is grim and dark!

haven't finished anything yet b/c my view of the characters keeps getting tweaked

That's cool though, because it means there's character development over the seasons. Why not try writing things in specific seasons. Like, if you have something set in s2, write it how you viewed the characters in that season. I have no idea if that makes sense. What I'm trying to say is that people change over time, and it's cool to see that reflected in fic as well as on the show.

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ana_grrl December 5 2005, 03:02:46 UTC

*g* Yay! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! And that it might help with the pics!

Thank you for writing the story. I hope you keep going with it.

Thank you for reading it! And I probably will write more. I'm really enjoying this Cameron/Teal'c thing. Thanks for the encouragement!

lyrstzha December 5 2005, 04:28:47 UTC

Wow, you are satisfyingly prolific. It's so cool to see the prequel already!

I especially like the physcial problems between Cam and Teal'c (symbiote!), because it feels like a very realistic and inevitable concern, and you handled it well.

ana_grrl December 5 2005, 04:32:25 UTC

satisfyingly prolific

This is a nice way of saying 'obsessive', right? Right *wink*

I'm glad the physical problems inclusion wasn't off-putting. Eww, symbiote. Thanks!

tealc_junky December 5 2005, 05:05:42 UTC

Personally, I'm of the opinion it would have been off-putting if you hadn't addressed it. It's a pretty big potential squick, after all, and I must agree that it was very well handled. Teal'c would so totally just not follow him. Nothing more said or done, no fallout/repurcussions/recriminations, just walk away and continue as usual. And I can totally see Cameron getting over it in the heat of the moment, though still being aware of it.

ana_grrl December 5 2005, 05:10:26 UTC

Shiny! It's a relief that addressing it this way wasn't clunky or anything. And that the characterisations worked for that part of it :D

*points to brand new Teal'c/Cameron icon courtesy of deani_bean*

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_minxy_ December 5 2005, 19:34:48 UTC

Oooooh, this is great! The chemistry is fantastic and the angst about getting involved with a jaffa is very appropriate for the setting and it's wonderful.

I love when characters are both compelling to each other and competant soldiers (or whatever) you have pulled both off very well.

Have I mentioned that I'm so glad you're in this fandom now? *loves*

And, deani hooked you up with some fantastic icons. Well done!

ana_grrl December 5 2005, 19:40:16 UTC

*grins like maniac (but not dangerous maniac)* YAY! Thanks. This is like the AU that ate my brain or something. I'm not complaining, because it's fun to write this stuff, although it is completely out of the blue. It's super wonderful that the chemistry works and the angst works, and it's not overly -- dramatic. Or crap. Thanksthanksthanks!

Also, yes the icons are super lovely. Happy!