Fic - More Than One and One

[alwayseven]

More Than One and One
One Direction
Niall/Zayn
2,000 words
Summary: Zayn hadn’t quite figured out how to wrap his head around the fact that nothing about being with Niall was what he’d thought it would be.
Note: For this prompt at 1dkinkmeme. It was supposed to be dirtier but it just turned into sap

Comments

[estrella30]

this is awesome! so sweet and hot - great job! thanks so much for posting it!!

[alwayseven]

Thank you so much for reading and for the comment :)

Also, I just wanted to tell you that way back in the day (2006, omg) I read and fangirled every J2 story you wrote. It is a thrill and a half to see you in One Direction fandom.

[estrella30]

lol, yay! the fic was def great and I thought your username looked familiar! so awesome to see familiar faces in 1d now. just added you if its all right :D

[alwayseven]

Excellent! (I friended you a little while back, when I saw you comment on something 1D-related but I'm notoriously terrible at commenting :/ will work on it :D)

[skiptothelu]

Okay, I loved this. I love the picture you created with not only Niall and Zayn, but their relation to the others. I liked Harry's comments and how they came back to Zayn in the end! But, these two lines stuck out (and not in a good way), I get the style you were going for here, but these two sort of broke that flow.

It shot through him like a rocket going off.
hips pushing up as he came like a shotgun with a low groan.

It sort of split up the smooth feeling the rest of the piece was written with. The rocket and shotgun analogies just didn't work for me. I loved the rest though. I look forward to reading more from you!

[alwayseven]

Thank you for taking the time to read and to comment. I also wanted to say thank you for the constructive feedback. I feel like a lot of people are uncomfortable leaving constructive criticism, especially in public view, so thank you for that, I really appreciate it.

[skiptothelu]

It's okay. I honestly only give it to writers who I think would actually improve from it, or take it without cursing me to death. I'm honestly the worst at accepting it, haha, which is odd considering I hope to be published someday! I read it, then don't look at it for like three days, and then I can go back and take in what they're telling me. I'm awful.

[badjujuboo]

that was SUCH a perfect canon feel to who Niall would be in the bedroom. Kind and caring and dirty hot (he is irish hehe). I loved how much of their relationship we saw within one scorchingly hot sex scene! Especially Harry and his endearing little comment about taking care of Niall when it's really that Zayn and Niall take care of each other. Absolutely gorgeous read!

[alwayseven]

Thank you for the lovely comment! At first the idea of writing about Niall having sex intimidated me because I had no idea how to do it and then I realized that in my head he would just approach it the way he does everything else and that made sense to me. They were fun to write so thank you so much for reading.

[mediaville]

Okay. I was just commenting about how all of a sudden there's all of this Niall/Zayn fic popping up on my flist, and I was like, "bzuh?" because it never really even occurred to me to ship these two. BUT THEN. I saw that YOU wrote some, and no joke I was JUST telling someone how much I loved your J2BB from a zillion years ago and how I wished someone would write a gay-for-pay porn!AU for the One Direction guys, so I thought, okay, I'll give this a shot.

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And now I'm kind of shipping it?

UGH. But this was really hot. Smutty and detailed and awesome and I could really just picture it all happening just like this. I LOVE that Niall doesn't mind that the boys assume he's the one taking it. His lack of pretense is absolutely charming.

This was also one of my favorite parts: The first is done, maybe the rest will come a bit easier, Jesus.

YES, GOOD. WRITE MOAR.

[alwayseven]

Oh my god, I'm so excited to see you in One Direction fandom, it is making my LIFE right now.

The fact that you read this pairing thrills me, thank you for giving it a shot and thank you for the awesome comments about that big bang story. I've had a Zayn/Niall porn au in my head ever since this because I do love a good porn au.

YES PLEASE SHIP ZAYN/NIALL. I need more of it, I need it all the time. Though my most favorite thing about One Direction is that I can see/get behind every SINGLE PAIRING.

Thank you for reading and thank you for the awesome comment.

[mauralee88]

Beautiful imagery. Very intense. A great blend of sweetness & utter debauchery. Loved it.

[alwayseven]

Lovely, thank you so much for the sweet comment and for reading.