Oh my god, they're adorable. I love this plotline. I could probably read their interactions forever.
On a more coherent note, I think the dialogue in this is excellent. It's very clear who is speaking when; their diction and syntax is similar enough to sound normal, but distinct in a way that's often difficult to achieve.
Karl Urban icon is the closest I get to James Bond.
I don't know if this is going to be coherent at all but here goes:
I have no idea what specifically goes on before or after this piece, but I am slowly writing more small tidbits about them. Currently one of the two is a lot more serious than I predicted and thus it...takes me longer to write because of how terse the moment is and how I need to pick each word and turn of phrase as perfectly as possible. The second knows where it's going broadly, but can't seem to find the next stepping stone. SO. More of these guys someday, I just don't know when.
I'm glad you think so. Personally I really enjoy writing dialogue and really feel like it's (one of) my forte(s), but it's very, very nice to hear I'm not delusional on this front. >.< So thank you heaps and heaps~ ♥
We can be incoherent together, although I think we both managed to pull ourselves together admirably.
You know, they considered Karl Urban for Bond. Think how much better our lives would be if the already awesome Casino Royale had Karl Urban in it. Just... think about that.
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Feel free! I'm a pretty friendly guy. The more, the merrier!
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Actually I'm writing to the East of the Sun and West of the Moon soundtrack
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because this is so goddamn epic. :D
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dfsgjhsfdfjs thank you~
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On a more coherent note, I think the dialogue in this is excellent. It's very clear who is speaking when; their diction and syntax is similar enough to sound normal, but distinct in a way that's often difficult to achieve.
Karl Urban icon is the closest I get to James Bond.
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I have no idea what specifically goes on before or after this piece, but I am slowly writing more small tidbits about them. Currently one of the two is a lot more serious than I predicted and thus it...takes me longer to write because of how terse the moment is and how I need to pick each word and turn of phrase as perfectly as possible. The second knows where it's going broadly, but can't seem to find the next stepping stone. SO. More of these guys someday, I just don't know when.
I'm glad you think so. Personally I really enjoy writing dialogue and really feel like it's (one of) my forte(s), but it's very, very nice to hear I'm not delusional on this front. >.< So thank you heaps and heaps~ ♥
...Karl Urban >>>> James Bond.
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You know, they considered Karl Urban for Bond. Think how much better our lives would be if the already awesome Casino Royale had Karl Urban in it. Just... think about that.
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But the world would've exploded from awesome. It's just one of those things. Karl Urban + James Bond = apocalypse by awesome.
WOW
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