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ziyalofhaiti

fanfic | svu | eo | fingerprints

Sep 16, 2010 01:39

Fingerprints
EO SVU story
rating: Mature/NC-17
for Ellie

“El, El!” Olivia’s voice brings him out of his reverie.

“What?”

“You’re drooling.”

Shit! It’s so embarrassing how much he wants her.

( He wants to wipe the drool off, but she is quicker. )

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Comments 4

dandelioncrayon September 16 2010, 01:28:29 UTC

Oh my god, that was amazing! I could picture them every moment of it. If it ever were to happen on the show, I think this is one of the best ways they could do it. Fantastic job!

ziyalofhaiti September 16 2010, 08:55:19 UTC

Thanks for taking the time to let me know what you think :)

tattletaler September 17 2010, 03:29:47 UTC

That was super hot! The only thing I'd mention is the beginning you briefly used past tense, and then switched it up and stayed in present tense. Works much better in present.

Fab job!

ziyalofhaiti September 17 2010, 12:36:12 UTC

I remember thinking about the tenses when I was writing it, but I guess I never checked later on. Thanks for catching that! Glad you liked it and took the time to let me know what you think :)