Reciprocate 1/1

[zinnamom]

Title: Reciprocate
Pairing: Ianto/Owen
Rating: PG

Spoilers: Only for season one.
Disclaimer: All rights belong to RTD and BBC. No profit is being made.

Author's Notes:  English isn’t my mother tongue so if you see any mistakes feel free to point them out to me.

Summary: Owen doesn’t want to be cruel. But when he’s hurt, he wants

Comments

[criccieth]

ow! ow ow ow!! God, Owen can be pure poison.

A good story, but what a nasty piece of work Owen is!

(on the English front - it's not bad at all, I would never have guessed you are writing in a second language! Your first line about Gwen: it should be "her hackles", not shackles (but that could just be a mis-type. The last line of that paragraph - "it were her reactions", should be "it was her reactions". The last line in the first paragraph about Ianto: "the persons who claimed to love him" should be "the people" (English plurals are VERY hard to work out).

Jacks should be "Jack's" (you're talking about something belonging to him).

"The only one, who is left, is Ianto". You don't need the first comma. A more natural way of having Owen think this [assuming this is Owen's thought-line] would be "The only one left's Ianto, and...." or something along those lines.

Trust me, for an un-beta'd piece whose author is not English, those are minute errors - I've seen pieces with far more and still enjoyed them!

[zinnamom]

Thank you for pointing out those errors. They should be all fixed now.

And I agree with you Owen can be quite horrible, but I love him all the same.

[echo_fangirl]

Ooh, ouch! Very interesting take, thanks for sharing! :)

[zinnamom]

You're welcome!

[wicca_faith_fi]

nooooooooooo! yOU CANNOT LEAVE IT THERE! I forbid you! I have to have what happens next, how does owen use Ianto's love to hurt him. I love the ending but it's making my brain want to EXPLODE!

[zinnamom]

That can't be healthy, does you're brain do that a lot?

I hadn't really thought of a follow up I kinda like the ending this way.
But I suppose you could read my fic Restoration as a strange sort of follow up to this one(it explores what could happen if Owen fell in love with Ianto after season one) .

[wicca_faith_fi]

ok! I'm off to find Restoration, it sounds awesome!

[zinnamom]

Gushing, Ooh I like that! You can carry on if you like.

More?
Looks around, under pillows, lifts up keyboard to check underneath...
There doesn't seem to be anything more.
worried frown...

[zinnamom]

Thanks for the comment!