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[zia_montrose]

Prompts: Valentine's Day, conflict, chocolate. Here's my attempt to jump through all three hoops.

For the Fluff Thread.

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“Will you sit next to me in class?” James asked, his hazel eyes softening for Lily as the Fat Lady swung shut behind them.  They trotted down the stairs hand in hand; he gave hers a doting squeeze.

“I told you, I don’t feel

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[rosathome]

Oh this is so cute. I love James and Lily and tension and Valentine's Day and you constructed this so nicely. The conflict is properly real to them in this relationship. He doesn't understand straight away what the problem is but he gets there in the end and Lily, even though she's angry and embarrassed still cares enough to give him time to do so.

And Lily's challenge at the end shows exactly how well she knows her boy. *sigh*

Just one quibble. If the house elves had baked chocolate souffle, wouldn't it have sunk long before James could wrap it and give it to Lily? Unless there's some magical way of keeping it in that perfect, just out of the oven state?

But hey, it's chocolate, it's Valentine's Day - it worked for me!

[rosathome]

Oh and I meant to say, I really liked the 'comet' in James's chest. Bit like a monster, huh?

[zia_montrose]

Good eye. Yes, I intended it as a parallel to Harry's monster. : )

[zia_montrose]

Thanks, Girlyswot! I was a bit worried about this piece. I picture James and his friends acting a bit more mature by seventh year, but I'll blame the departure on Valentine's Day high spirits. Yeah, that's it. : )

Lily likes a good game too, I think, no?

Thanks for the fun comments. Oh, and I think souffles are meant to be eaten once they've fallen, but I like your magical explanation.

[rosathome]

Well, 'more mature' doesn't mean 'had complete character change'. I think the marauders are always going to know how to have fun. And 17/18 year olds are not always terribly mature in my experience anyway! I thought this worked fine.

And maybe I should stop worrying about trying to get my souffles out onto the table in that 30 seconds while they're still puffy and beautiful! LOL.

[rosathome]

I'm going to friend you, btw. Hope that's okay.

[zia_montrose]

No problem. I've gotta dash, but I'll add you when I return.

[zia_montrose]

Sorry, I'm all wet on the souffle... It looks like what I was thinking of is actually called "souffle cake" (served fallen) and it's quite different. And true fallen souffle is ghastly. Doh! Oh well, I'd better get James to fork over another pack of Droobles for a good re-souffling (that's Franglais) charm. Or just change it in the fic. He's been in enough trouble already. ; ) Thanks for pointing it out.

[rosathome]

Always happy to pick for baking and other household errors. LOL. But souffle cake sounds pretty good to me. I also have a fabulous recipe for chocolate truffle cake which Lily might like...

[zia_montrose]

I'm finally getting around to changing this. Chocolate truffle cake it is.
You might have to post that recipe some time!