Belated Happy Birthday, Fred and George!

[zia_montrose]

Testing Wheezes

“Now all we need is a willing participant.” George mused, striding the stairs two at a time while running a finger over the dusty elf snouts. Their mother had insisted they remain at the communal dinner table longer than they’d liked.

“Who said anything about willing?” Fred grinned widely as they gained the landing and the two came

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[stmargarets]

Poor Ron! You certainly found the "evil" side of F&G. I liked these lines:

"About time our own kin started helping us out.”

“Give us more reason to dote on them when we’re famous.” George concurred."

LOL. That's confidence for you.

And then you continue with the theme:

“Ah, Ronniekins. Bless his heart,” George whispered affectionately.

This is certainly their attitude in OotP with the first years.

And Ron wears tidy whities. LOL. I also liked the contents of Ron's trunk. It evoked scenes from the other books and made this really feel like JKR's world.

[zia_montrose]

1-Do you think it's too evil to fit the twins characters? (Yes is an o.k. answer.)
I always wonder if I've portrayed characters true to canon.
The twins do seem hardest on Ron to me. Heck, they're nicer to Harry sometimes- gave him the map, for example.
2-Did you spot Fred/George differences?
Hopefully the twins will leave me alone now and I can move on to my Marauder WIP, which has been eluding me. Maybe because I'm scared to mess it up. I keep writing around it. Thanks for stopping by!

[stmargarets]

I don't think they would do something to Ron and not have an antidote - but that's your punchline. And they did tell Hermione that they experimented on themselves first - remember they had the boils and could hardly sit down?

The other thing with F&G is that they don't tend to do things unless provoked - the teddy bear into a spider was after he broke their broom. And when they do do something surprising, the results are short-lived - like Neville and the canary creams. So if you changed the prank to something less harmful - like an invisibilty charm on the underpants (sort of like the headless hats) it could be funny but not hurtful.

I noticed that Fred had the ideas and that George either agreed or questioned his ideas.

[zia_montrose]

Good points- Your memory of canon is astonishing and you are a very perceptive reader. This was just a fun attempt to get some lead out (practice, practice) so it is best for me to move onto my WIP at this point, but I'm a glutton for constructive criticism. Fred was meant to have more mischievous ideas and George to be more understanding of people. Ah, and I remember those boils very well! Thanks again.

[zia_montrose]

Can I just mention again how time generous it is of you to comment every week? I think I failed to mention that up there, and I'm feeling fortunate to be on the receiving end. -Zia

[stmargarets]

LOL. I don't mind a bit. It makes me feel useful! I was going to say that I don't know HBP as well as I should, but unfortunately, F&G aren't in it much. They were hard on Ron (of course he threw a knife at them - LOL - those Weasleys)

Good luck with your WIP - it's a long, lonely slog - so be sure to share snippets on the fluff thread or your live journal. Everyone needs encouragement now and then. :)