Oh. Wow. Happy birthday to *me*! Thank you so much. What did I ever do to deserve a fic like this? It's gorgeous! You already know how much I love the way you write Yuma, but this is right up there with the Yuletide piece you did last year.
I just adore the voice you have for Ben, how it complicates him. The voice for both actually, your subtle dialogue. So many beautiful pieces that I could c&p, but this part is my favorite:
He loved Dan as the devil loved all his creatures. So pained, so desperate, so raw and perfect as he struggled to overcome all burdens, both those that had been heaped upon him and those he had wrought himself. And why, when there was this love in his heart, was he still the devil? Because he knew. He knew the burdens could not be overthrown. They stayed. One lived with them. One succumbed to them again and again
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You are so very welcome! It was an absolute treat for me to write it for you...the fannish equivalent of baking and sharing chocolate cake for your birthday! And now I kinda want a slice of cake and a glass of proseco. ;)
I wish that I could be more coherent Oh, honey, no! You give FABulous fback. ***smooches yr cheek*** That line just jumped out at me and I wanted to respond.
It seems like it's been a while since you've posted, just wanted to say that I hope everything's alright with you and yours.
twice is nice ;)zeldadestryOctober 9 2008, 19:49:55 UTC
I thought I had commented You did! Over at threetentrain But thank you so much for doing so again...I am always happy to know a story has been enjoyed! :)
Hi, stumbled upon fan fiction by pure dumb luck and I have to say I am so glad I did! This story was so beautiful, I had always thought there was something more in the Ben/Dan relationship. You captured them perfectly! I would definately read your stories in the future. Great!
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I just adore the voice you have for Ben, how it complicates him. The voice for both actually, your subtle dialogue. So many beautiful pieces that I could c&p, but this part is my favorite:
He loved Dan as the devil loved all his creatures. So pained, so desperate, so raw and perfect as he struggled to overcome all burdens, both those that had been heaped upon him and those he had wrought himself. And why, when there was this love in his heart, was he still the devil? Because he knew. He knew the burdens could not be overthrown. They stayed. One lived with them. One succumbed to them again and again ( ... )
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And now I kinda want a slice of cake and a glass of proseco. ;)
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Oh, honey, no! You give FABulous fback. ***smooches yr cheek***
That line just jumped out at me and I wanted to respond.
It seems like it's been a while since you've posted, just wanted to say that I hope everything's alright with you and yours.
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Dan didn’t understand the world as it was, seemed to live in the world as it should be
*flails*
There are so many other lines I love too but it would take me forever to point them all out.
Wonderful.
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You did! Over at threetentrain
But thank you so much for doing so again...I am always happy to know a story has been enjoyed! :)
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Hi, stumbled upon fan fiction by pure dumb luck and I have to say I am so glad I did!
Fanfic is an AWESOME playground...HAVE FUN!!!
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