Hush, Hush: Chapter 22

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: Well. We left off when things were getting really batshit, so I shouldn't leave you hanging, huh? Oh, and folks? I've begun reading the sequel, Crescendo. I'm just a few chapters in and...um...we're all in for a treat

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[zelda_queen]

Seeing as Fitzpatrick's research seems to consist entirely of generic movies, she was probably under the impression that the desk clerk was the only employee in there. In any case, they never see another person besides the desk clerk and Nora never expresses a desire to see the manager, so I guess it's a moot point -_-

[tsukasabuddha]

Wow, was this really written by a woman? The "she wants non-smoking" part really sticks with me.

On the one hand, I am annoyed that she is making such a huge deal out of just sharing a room with the opposite gender. Your clothes are soaked and you don't need to stay in the bed. When I was roomed with guys I slept on the floor.

On the other hand, I it is irritating that she just leaves it at the adorable awkward trope level when Patch has been essentially a sexual predator so far and has made it very clear what he intends to have happen in that room regardless of any protests.

[zelda_queen]

Yes, it was written by a woman. One of questionable intelligence.

That's just it. For all the reasons Nora has to legitimately be afraid of Patch, not a one of them occurs to her. Instead, she just is like "Tee hee, he's so hawt and sexy and makes me cream myself, so I just don't TRUST myself to not go to pieces and have premarital sex with him!"

[carakasla]

I'd like to show the court Exhibit A, Chapter 22 of Hush, Hush to prove my case that authorial interference will in fact, in any case without exception, ruin a decent to good story. Which is rather sad.

[gehayi]

OH FOR FUCK'S SAKE.

Okay, I know that Becca Fitzpatrick is unbelievably naive...but Merlin's manky balls! How many things can you think of that could go wrong in this situation? Because I've got a list:

1) MURDER. Nora even EXPRESSED reasonable fear that Patch would murder her earlier. So this is an in-canon possibility.

2) RAPE. Again, a reasonable fear Nora expressed earlier.

3) Rape and murder. In case Patch decides to combine his tastes.

4) Drugging her with date rape drugs and then raping her.

5) Holding Nora incommunicado and intimidating her until she agrees to have sex with him. (Holding someone against their will counts as kidnapping, so now we're into federal offenses.)

6) Kidnapping and date rape.

7) Kidnapping and violent rape.

8) Kidnapping, beating and violent rape.

9) Kidnapping, beating, violent rape and murder.

I could go on...but I'm just getting too mad. I need to do a spitefic NOW.

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[zelda_queen]

Oh, Fitzpatrick isn't totally naive. We'll see that in two chapter's time. *She* knows what a guy like Patch can do in a situation like that. Nora is the one who is incredibly stupid and doesn't think of it.

Logic: There is none in this book.

[blonde_sarcasm]

"Because clearly people who eat Cheetos messily are sloven and sleezy."

...*hastily stashes away Cheeto bag*

"Nora then promptly forgets all of those things when Patch comes out, totally shirtless (though with pants on, thank the lord)."

YES, THANK YOU.

"She reaches over and touches it, which Patch clearly does not like."

Oh, great, it goes both ways. Nora, if Patch does something you don't like, please, don't allow him to. THAT DOESN'T MEAN YOU CAN AS WELL.

Why doesn't she just keep her slightly uncomfortable wet clothing on? Afraid she'll get a cold? And why doesn't one of them sleep on the floor? In the bathtub? Get a room with two beds!? Don't tell me this dingy hotel had lots of occupents or that they don't have any rooms with two beds when they have one with KING-SIZE.

Oh, wait. The author thought it would be "hawt". Right.

I do NOT want to hear the start of the next chapter *twitches*

Exellant work, Miss Zelda Queen.

Re: Logic: There is none in this book.

[blonde_sarcasm]

I like to think the hotel clerk was fucking with Patch and lying to them both because he sees how he intimidates Nora ("You can't f-force me to stay here." When hearing a chick, probably looking scared, say that, what would your reaction be?) and is dialing the police while they sleep.

The image of the police showing up with the girl Patch was intimidating in his bed would not go well for him and Nora would tell them aaaaall about him and I HAVE TO WRITE A SPITE-FIC! *dashes away*

Re: Logic: There is none in this book.

[zelda_queen]

"Why doesn't she just keep her slightly uncomfortable wet clothing on?"

Because Fitzpatrick wants to set up for a "sexy" scene which, in a few chapter's time, will cross into FULL-BLOW DISGUSTING!

"I do NOT want to hear the start of the next chapter *twitches*"

Oh, that chapter doesn't start out too badly. It's the one after that which you'll want to hide from.

Re: Logic: There is none in this book.

[blonde_sarcasm]

Eeep. Thanks for the warning.